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Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

0 posted 2001-10-23 10:18 AM

Footprints

The night is gone, but evening haze
Has laid a coat of icy glaze
Upon each blade, upon each dream
In twists of life’s uncertain maze

The path to our enchanting place
were footsteps marked in icy lace
soft imprints frozen crystal clear
that now can never be retraced

The memories that I hold so dear
cannot retrieve a fallen tear
nor capture moments, time or space
that fill my thoughts from year to year

In fantasies within the eye
of love that somehow passed me by
I see a portrait of your face
that haunts me through the morning haze

The twisting maze, the icy glaze
in crystal stars adorn the sky
but disappear in winter frost
The footprint lost, I know not why

Elizabeth santos

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 10-23-2001).]

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2001-10-23 10:31 AM

*sigh* and crystal tears are what you shed when memories bring dreams into your head. *sigh* how sad this poem is. Its beauty cannot help but touch the heart of the reader.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Abigaile
Member

since 2001-10-21

Posts 112
San Mateo, CA

2 posted 2001-10-23 10:58 AM

I love the imagery you invoke. This is a heartbreaking yet beautiful poem. *warm hugs*

"I am nae poet, in a sense;
But just a rhymer like by chance..."
-Robert Burns

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

3 posted 2001-10-23 11:14 AM

"Memories are but moments frozen in time,
for our hearts to remember and to find
when, how and why they remain
this way upon our mind."

I find myself retracing my footprints all the time, and find myself lost from so many paths crossed, entwined.
Good job ... like this much!!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-10-23 11:37 AM

Elizabeth,
The exquisite of this worded web
Has caught about this lonely head.
And I am drawn within its stars
To pluck some daises that were ours.

I keep you in my heart asleep
And only wake you when I weep.
Love Sy

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2001-10-23 11:54 AM

Each footprint lost must step in a new direction, don't you think?... Your words are wondrous as usual, my dear friend..

cpalmer
Senior Member

since 2001-06-26

Posts 977
Phoenix, Az

6 posted 2001-10-23 12:46 PM

Liz,
beautiful as always....so sad

I love it though
Hugs
Cindi

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2001-10-23 01:13 PM

Always, always, your poetry has a lovely sing-song quality...always...

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2001-10-23 01:21 PM

Elizabeth - I found this a bittersweet one, as always any memory, sad or sweet eventually brings a smile to me anyway. I felt the sadness in not knowing where this memory belonged in this poem. Why would one want to retrace their steps when there is so much in front of them? I always think I am grateful for what was, and wonder what wonders are next for me? As you can see, this made me think and ramble on but that is what your poetry does for me, I just never do it on here

Try giving your smile to someone who doesn't have one, and I bet someone will come along and give you another.
~* Mysteria *~

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

9 posted 2001-10-23 01:32 PM

Elizabeth,

Beautiful as usual.

Dawn

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

10 posted 2001-10-23 04:01 PM

THank you for your very kind comments. The point of this poem is that you can't go back to the past. The footprints have disappeared. My rhyming scheme is a little wacky - just experimenting with sound.
I appreciate all of your remarks
Thanks
Liz

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

11 posted 2001-10-23 05:28 PM

The "visible" footprints may be gone but as long as you hold the path within your memory, then there is always a chance of finding your way home again. Wonderful expression of an intrigal part of our lives and of course when one is penned by you, the flow is always a treat. Beautifully written and expressed and a true joy to read.

Lisa
Member

since 1999-07-08

Posts 88
Lunenburg,VT USA

12 posted 2001-10-23 05:43 PM

I liked this, very much. Thank you.

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

13 posted 2001-10-23 06:22 PM

yes, the rhymes are very interesting. . . they work out very well when read aloud!!

and yes, ever forward. . . never back. . . no matter how much we might want to sometimes. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

14 posted 2001-10-27 06:28 AM

Elizabeth-
   Wow...you never cease to amaze and impress.
   Yet another masterpiece from your pen.
   Beautiful, my friend.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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