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Nature Girl
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since 2001-10-19
Posts 31


0 posted 2001-10-21 06:51 PM


refuse to feel
refuse to flee
if I move I will crawl
but I refuse to concede

After you touch me
I burn all night
I blister by morning
show you the scars with
almost pride

My hand offered,
does little to invite...
open skin seems too tender to
hold you this tight

Maybe I bleed
Maybe I crumble
and it could be all in my head
I know I too often
allow myself to surrender
to the demons I’ve lead
But I swear if you asked it
I would stand and be strong
I would grow back the bones
that are dust when you’re gone

Without my asking
you give more than you can
I keep taking
more than there is to be had
Without your asking
I am blind to provide
But one word spoken
and  you have my life

Let me be the one to hold you
when the dragons in your head speak their fire
God please give me the role to sustain you
when you’re broken and tired

I am more than I can be for myself alone
Lately I know that it would seem
I’m not the one in control

Well, Maybe I bleed
Maybe I crumble
and it’s all in my head
I know I too often
allow myself to surrender
to the demons I’ve lead
But I swear if you asked it
I would stand and be strong
I would grow back the bones
that are dust when you’re gone

You think you have more strength
even as you expire
than I could ever become
But you don’t know me, you don’t know me, you don’t know me
For your sake I’m sorry I have only shown my weakest side

Because I bleed
Because I crumble
Because I battle demons in my head
Doesn’t mean my heart won't hold it’s citadel
with the will of a god,
with the might of  this heart,
with the spirit of soul,
with the love you inspire,
all I encompass, I offer to give
I keep a room for you, if you’d allow yourself in...

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Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

1 posted 2001-10-21 07:02 PM


But I swear if you asked it
I would stand and be strong
I would grow back the bones
that are dust when you’re gone

This is really a good poem.  Welcome...you'll like it here.  

Sven
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2 posted 2001-10-22 02:46 PM


our strength is our weakness?
or, our weakness is our strength??

powerful questions. . . powerful words. . . well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

BrightStar
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since 2001-04-08
Posts 219

3 posted 2001-10-23 07:00 PM


This deserves more attention than this. Bump.

Admiring you at Passions.

Magnus
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4 posted 2001-10-23 07:07 PM


This poem has an immense amount of feelings
within it.   A very powerfully written piece.
Thanx for sharing it.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-10-23 07:30 PM


After you touch me
I burn all night
I blister by morning
show you the scars with
almost pride

My hand offered,
does little to invite...
open skin seems too tender to
hold you this tight


Maybe I bleed
Maybe I crumble
and it could be all in my head
I know I too often
allow myself to surrender
to the demons I’ve lead
But I swear if you asked it
I would stand and be strong
I would grow back the bones
that are dust when you’re gone


Without my asking
you give more than you can
I keep taking
more than there is to be had
Without your asking
I am blind to provide
But one word spoken
and  you have my life


Let me be the one to hold you
when the dragons in your head speak their fire
God please give me the role to sustain you
when you’re broken and tired

I am more than I can be for myself alone

Lately I know that it would seem
I’m not the one in control

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Because I bleed
Because I crumble
Because I battle demons in my head
Doesn’t mean my heart won't hold it’s citadel
with the will of a god,
with the might of  this heart,
with the spirit of soul,
with the love you inspire,
all I encompass, I offer to give
I keep a room for you, if you’d allow yourself in...
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I wont have the words right now to tell you how deeply this poem touches me and effects me....
this is such an impressive level of expression and self exploration as well as an intense poetic confess of inner emotions.
You write with a wrenching depth of emotional sincerety and sharp honesty that many cant reach with in and touch.
The ache and longing lift off the page.
This shall be in my library for future reads.
take care poetess NG
jm

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

Midnitesun
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Gaia
6 posted 2001-10-23 07:33 PM


Oh, I like the bit about growing back those bones. An interesting poem!
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