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Death Would Take You Away
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Death Would Take You Away |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The night air cold, breath frosting, eyes tearing. Standing watch over a fair maiden high above. Watching for a thief coming to steal a fair heart. I have vowed to protect you, you know this. I have sworn to keep you safe from harm. I have bled countless drops as your keeper. I have cried a thousand times for you. You lie there resting, sleeping as I stand. I know your face smiles in peace, I know you sleep pleasantly, dreaming. I wish I could lie beside you, caress your hair. These walls have stood for four generations. For over three thousand sets of a full moon. Hundreds have died here beneath you. All sharing one common bond, one goal. Each of us has carried our burden faithfully. Our lives meaningless without a maiden fair. Our birth of no consequence, senseless A warrior, large heart, standing silent and tall. You have smiled down to me, my heart fluttering. Occasionally, a small gift dropped, a grape, a morsel. Laughing, you have said hello to me, my throat tight. I cannot answer, my code of silence I must keep. If I were allowed, I would tell you so many thoughts. I would give you endless pleasure and love. I would hold you closely in my arms, guarding you. I would cry tears of comfort, tears of joy. I can never tell you, for death awaits if I do. I can only ever love you, leave you there. Leave you sitting, peacefully yarning above me. For my death would take you away. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
interesting finale. enjoyable read. Well done  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
thank you.....thought I was going to get stuck with what to put at the end....but it came out okay.... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wow!! This so much reminded me of Romeo & Juliet, two star crossed lovers who were the epitome of love and romance. Your poem captured all of that Magnus.....excellent! Take care......Sue Suetang |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Standing at the bottom of the tower, pen in hand.....a thought expressed on paper.. Thanx Sue...I like writing this type of poetry. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Shoot....okay the tears are flowing. How very sad for these lovers. Can't you write a happy ending for this one? *sigh* You bring a great deal of emotion to life and touch the hearts of everyone who reads your work. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (edited 10-19-2001).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gee....you can't always have your cake and eat it as well....sometimes you get crumbs. Thanx Startime....I enjoy writing these. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
This is extremely touching.... -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
thank you Lady of S. I enjoy writing what I call tower poems....sort of Romeo and Juliett in a way.... |
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