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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-10-19 04:55 PM


loom of existence
building one thread at a time
weaving character
~*~
while being woven
you were placed in the pattern
inseparable
~*~
the shuttle passes
left to right and back again
slowly building us
~*~

Inspired by: To Weave a Spell of Seduction

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

© Copyright 2001 The Tall Texan aka Doctor Love - All Rights Reserved
Lady In White
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1 posted 2001-10-19 05:03 PM



warp, waft, threading life
blending lines into the weave
keeping us all warm

Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-10-19 05:07 PM


Interloper...so pleased to see you so inspired!  Thank you....write on!  ~Nancy


  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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just out of reach
3 posted 2001-10-19 06:46 PM


Interloper - I liked this very much. I think that if we are not careful, and we tug too hard on that loose thread....no...that one there...yes, then our life's plan may just unravel in front of our very eyes. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

[This message has been edited by Nightshade (edited 10-19-2001).]

Startime
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4 posted 2001-10-19 08:27 PM


*sigh* sensually beautiful. I do not know how you manage to put such emotion into so few words but you do a magnificent job of it. I LOVE IT!!!

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2001-10-20 01:55 PM


This is such a beautiful weave of thoughts Interloper ... each senryu distinctly unique in their own sentiments ... and brought forth wonderful imagery in my mind. Very nicely woven indeed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2001-10-20 02:08 PM




(smiles) Such beautiful words are woven from your golden heart! (smiles) Every loom contributes to another memory, another dream, another piece of life! (big hugggsssss) You have sucha  beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2001-10-20 02:38 PM


Beautiful!!!!!

love it very much

Charisma

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8 posted 2001-10-21 09:49 PM


well done by the Great Voice of the Southland. . .  

when you're inspired Sir, you're inpsired!!!

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Red-uni
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9 posted 2001-10-22 07:35 AM


Awesome poem to say to much in so few words.
I enjoyed the read.
Red  

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10 posted 2001-10-22 07:41 AM


excellent thoughts, interloper. Character is indeed created one thread at a time and is deeply woven into our lives..as is love for another. You put it together very well...
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11 posted 2001-10-22 09:46 AM


This is a beautiful write. Thank you for sharing it.
Interloper
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12 posted 2001-10-22 01:43 PM


Lady ~
Thanks for the warm fuzzies

Enchantress~
It is I who thanks you for the fine piece that inspired

Nightshade ~
Yes, I see it ... right there ... snip!  Won't unravel now

Startime ~
Golly, gee, shux.  (sigh) Be still my heart!

Kit ~
I try to be a good wordsmith but your compliments are too generous.  Thank you from the bottom of my heart

Noah ~
Wow!  Hey, could you turn that into a prayer for me?  Thanks loads

Charisma ~
Why, thank you   Now I know why they say beauty is in the eye of the beholder.  And, in your case, the beauty is the beholder

Sven~
A fine compliment, indeed, from the GR8 voice of the Northlands.  Gee, and all this time I thought I was inspired

Red~
Awesome?  Golly, I appreciate that

Balladeer ~
What a gracious and wonderful comment.  Thank you

SmartChick ~
Now I know you live up to your nick

Thank you all for your time and fantabulous comments.  You are the greatest!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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13 posted 2001-10-23 12:40 PM


Bump this one.

Admiring you at Passions.

A Whisper's Caress
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14 posted 2001-10-23 01:12 PM


loom of existence
building one thread at a time
weaving character


so much is said in this beautiful piece.
Loved the first stanza

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15 posted 2001-10-23 01:43 PM


Interloper,

So much said, so few words. Really liked this one.

                                    Dawn

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16 posted 2001-10-25 06:42 AM


Tightly woven threads
That silk the reflection soft
Strong as surreal steel


Great Craftsmanship! Exquisite.

Sincerely,
Regina

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17 posted 2001-10-29 05:01 PM


this is stunning, how did I miss this one!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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18 posted 2001-10-29 05:11 PM


Interloper...You do know how to make a  tender fit...beautiful!
Interloper
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19 posted 2001-10-29 06:19 PM


BrightStar ~
Thanks for the bump

AWC ~
I had hoped it would set the tone of the piece.  I am so glad you liked it

Dawn ~
I believe this is your first visit and I thank yoou for your time and your nice comment.  Come back soon

Regina ~
finely woven threads
the strings of my heart and yours
now beating as one

Lady of Shallot ~
I dunno ... I'm glad you didn't 'cuz you just made my day

Martie ~
That from the "tailor of tender fits" is one heck of a compliment.  I am honored

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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