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Decaflame
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since 2001-05-11
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0 posted 2001-10-18 12:22 PM


Hope Called

You scampered
from me
in those dog days
faster than a squirrel
harassed by a cat
because the fire
went out

so you said

~*~

now cool encroaches

you've come
for the last embers
believing there is warmth
in cinders

there are no answers
you can give
to silent whys
of why you still live

even your smiling eyes

cannot hide thin guise

I've never lied
nor shall I now

~*~

time was given
to mend
penance
that could have come
but the strain
of loss

too much

the feel of
cannon blast to stomach
at truths told
cratered too deep


you asked where it went
you didn’t see it
sticking to the
heel of your
shoe when
you left
the first
time

spitting out the
obvious
does nothing for
your intelligence,
nor mine

there's the door
here are your bags
Hope is waiting

© Copyright 2001 Decaflame - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2001-10-18 12:34 PM


Decaflame!  This is an incredible piece.  Really enjoyed this one.  Going back to have another look but wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed it the first time I read it.
~hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~
  

jwesley
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Spring, Texas
2 posted 2001-10-18 01:44 PM


Very much enjoyed this.

jwesley

cpalmer
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Phoenix, Az
3 posted 2001-10-18 01:49 PM


WOW! I really enjoyed this...such strong words...well written!
Hugs
cindi

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just out of reach
4 posted 2001-10-18 01:52 PM


Standing Ovation!!!! Yes, truth can be like a cannon blast to the stomach. This is just an awesome write. Into my library it goes. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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Member Rara Avis
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Deep in the heart
5 posted 2001-10-18 04:18 PM


guess I better not let the door hit me on the backside

Whew!  You laid it on whomever with a vengeance!  Well Done!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

RSWells
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6 posted 2001-10-18 04:57 PM


Clarity from one whose name is probably not Charity. Enjoyed
Dark Angel
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7 posted 2001-10-18 05:57 PM


Very powerful Decaflame.... I enjoyed!

Maree  

Startime
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Canada
8 posted 2001-10-18 07:09 PM


Very emotional words written with power and purpose. Very well done.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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9 posted 2001-10-19 01:32 AM


Now this was poetry  

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

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