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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2001-10-17 08:30 PM


(I would love to post my picture up on my profule. Can someone please help me figure out how to do it! I would really appreciate it! :-)



I'm Drowning
By: Noah Eaton
8/19/01

Passion swallows me
Pulling me beneath the surface
Losing myself in desire
I can't keep my balance

Fading into a dizzy spell
Lying in bed with this fever
Dreaming away the hours
Wishing for love to be delivered

Passion consumes my thoughts
It's hard for me to raise my head
Holding onto Hope
Yet greatly saddened having felt mislead

I'm drowing in a sea of passion
With depths of both smiles and sorrows
Craving ever so much for loves first kiss
Missing my love seemingly every tomorrow

© Copyright 2001 Nadia Lockheart - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-17 08:47 PM


Well, dear Noah, if you have to drown, drown in a sea of love and passion! Is there a better way to go?

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2 posted 2001-10-17 10:04 PM


Very expressive poem, Noah. I'm sure we have all had those agonizing moments.

To add your picture click on the Member's Area/Help link at the top of the page and then scroll down to the Upload Photo link. Everything is explained there. Good luck! If you still need help with it one of the Administrators can help you out, I'm sure.

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3 posted 2001-10-17 10:25 PM


Noah, I'll throw you out a lifeline - catch it dear poet. Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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4 posted 2001-10-17 10:53 PM


Passion swallows me
Pulling me beneath the surface
Losing myself in desire
I can't keep my balance"

this was my favorite part! Well done Noah
((hugs))


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5 posted 2001-10-17 10:59 PM


This sounds so painful.

Craving ever so much for loves first kiss
Missing my love seemingly every tomorrow

Those last two lines really hit me.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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