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Mistletoe Angel
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0 posted 2001-10-16 05:31 PM


(This will be my last posting here)

When You're Gone
By: Noah Eaton
10/3/01

I've cried an ocean of tears
To see a single dream come true of my own
I want you to sit next to me so badly
So I know I'm not alone
I wish I could talk to you
Brighten my mood when I am feeling blue
It's hard for me to cope these days
When my heart's crying for you

Should I hold onto my dreams?
Should I clave them in twain?
I want to be loved
I can't heal this pain
Sometimes I feel scared
That no one would want me
I hold onto that child inside of me
But I feel so dreary

When you're gone
Tears fall down my cheeks
This whole world is made for us all
But I can't help but cry in my bed it seems
When you're gone
My heart wants you so badly
There's a big space in my heart that feels broken
Filled with all my love for you...

I wish I was holding your hand
Feeling the warmth of your heart
Will I ever get to see you for real?
Will we always be left apart?

Should I hold onto my dreams?
Should I clave them in twain?
I want to be loved
I can't heal this pain
Sometimes I feel scared
That no one would want me
I hold onto that child inside of me
But I feel so dreary

When you're gone
Tears fall down my cheeks
This whole world is made for us all
But I can't help but cry in my bed it seems
When you're gone
My heart wants you so badly
There's a big space in my heart that feels broken
Filled with all my love for you...

My heart wants you so badly...
My heart...wants you...

© Copyright 2001 Nadia Lockheart - All Rights Reserved
Mysteria
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1 posted 2001-10-16 05:36 PM


What a beautiful poem of longing for a love that binds your heart.  I don't know why this poem is your last Noah, but I wish you well in whatever you are doing, and hope you will come to visit, and come back one day, your work will be missed by me.  Take care.

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

Startime
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2 posted 2001-10-16 05:54 PM


This is a beautiful poem, Noah. I will be sad to see you go. Hope it won't be for long.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

sunshinemist
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3 posted 2001-10-16 05:54 PM


Noah, This is a beautiful, longing love poem that I really enjoyed. Your words are captured beautifully. I hope this will not be your last.  
     Wishing you peace and God' Blessing
           ~hugs~ Marie

smiles ~Marie~
happiness is contentment of the heart

dolphin
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4 posted 2001-10-16 06:24 PM


Oh how well I relate. Beautiful words. I have trouble expressing my own emotions sometimes, but your words have conveyed exactly how I feel as word. An excellent display of true sorrow.

"Love is like pi - natural, irrational, and very important."
- Lisa Hoffman-

Tracey
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5 posted 2001-10-16 11:23 PM


This is so heartfelt. I have felt like this too. But why will this be your last posting here? Hopefully you'll not be gone for long, and will come back with some new poetry. And happy birthday in a couple of weeks. Come back and we'll throw a party for you  

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Mistletoe Angel
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6 posted 2001-10-16 11:34 PM


Mysteria: Thank you so much for your beautiful comment; I love your beautiful fantasy poems always, and will say depending on how others respond

Startime: I've missed you so much; I'm glad you're still writing, and miss you back at the meadow and AspiringPoets. How has Erin been? Tell her I said Hi, and have a beautiful evening!

Sunshinemist: Oh, thank you so much! I don't this to be my last; really; I just feel that hardly anyone here enjoys reading what I write; I've never gotten more than 8 comments on a poem here, and I feel unspecial. But if you and everyone really loves me the way you do, I'll stay forever! :-)

Dolphin: Thank you so so much! I have been feeling depressed about being all lonely and turning 18 years old on the 28th of October, and how my youth has slipped away. That's what's been making me feel depressed. God Bless You, sweet dolphin!

Tracey: OH MY GOSH, how did you know my birthday was coming up? (big hugggssssss) Would you really do that for me? (smiles) Thank you for the sweet compliemnt; it's wonderful people like you who encourage me to stay! Let's wait and see what others have to say!


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