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MyEnchanted_Melody
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

0 posted 2001-10-16 03:49 PM







~~~ Red Roses ~~~


I was given red roses
The other day
I looked at them and
wondered what do they say?
But
Wonder more
what would they say
If you were the one
Who gave them that day?
Would their whispers be different?
Their red a darker hue
To tell of the heart of you?
Their touch
Silky and more velvet than before
To tell of that door?

I wonder what would you say
As you give these roses away
Would you make sure
That our fingers touch
As you give those roses
Wrapped in your hush?

Would you leave your imprints?
Your words?
Secretly hidden
Inscribed within the folds
of the soft petals
and I would count the words
the letters
your name
echoing there
my name endlessly
written within that
silky velvet wear.

Would you give roses
Wet with their twinkling dew?
Droplets shining
As the brightest star
To tell me just who you are.

Would you ask me to close my eyes
As you leave them in my hand
Wishing
Praying
That I would understand?

Or
would you send them
with someone else?
Not wanting to be the messenger
Of this crimson message
And all it tells
But
If you only know of my ignorance
All my articulated knowledge lost
Wrapped in this crimson cell.

Oh……I know
How would you choose
To give them with a deep sigh
held together
With your favourite tie
How would you choose
Not to let me go
Until I hear in their every whisper
Every breath
The breath
and
The pounding heart of you.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Thank you









"Oh...me!Oh Life!
Of the questions of these recurring..........
Of myself forever reproaching myself,
for who more foolish than I......"
~Whitman~

[This message has been edited by MyEnchanted_Melody (edited 10-16-2001).]

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Startime
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1 posted 2001-10-16 03:56 PM


*sigh* absolutely beautiful. Wouldn't it be wonderful to get roses. *sigh* how incredibly romantic. This poem is heavenly. Thank you, so much, for sharing it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

RosePetal
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2 posted 2001-10-16 03:58 PM


This one's going straight to my library. It is so brilliant! I am a red rose lover as you can tell! Especially liked this stanza..
"I wonder what would you say
As you give these roses away
Would you make sure
That our fingers touch
As you give those roses
Wrapped in your hush?"

[This message has been edited by RosePetal (edited 10-16-2001).]

MyEnchanted_Melody
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3 posted 2001-10-16 04:18 PM




~Startime~

Thank You so much for enjoying it and for you wonderful comment.

I have managed finally to make the background music work, so I hope this would make it even more enjoyable.

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Rose Petal~
I am ever so glad that you have enjoyed it. And to find another red rose lover like the hopless romantic in me...

Thank you dear
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~


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4 posted 2001-10-16 05:29 PM


Sigh!  This was truly exquisite.  I loved these lines
"That our fingers touch
As you give those roses
Wrapped in your hush?"  

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

Magnus
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5 posted 2001-10-16 05:34 PM


I sincerely hope that you get those roses,
handed directly to you.  Your words are
testament to what you deserve from a gift
so nice.  Being so many styles of poetry,
I feel that the message is far more impor-
tant than just the form.  IF a person
remembers your words,  smiles from them,
gets a warm feeling.....then I feel you
have done well.  And....you have.

Sven
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6 posted 2001-10-16 06:26 PM


my friend. . . every day you amaze me more and more . . .  

wonderful. . .

----------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

MyEnchanted_Melody
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7 posted 2001-10-17 08:42 AM




~Mysteria~
Thank you soooooo much kind lady for enjoying this one.

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~Magnus~

To get those roses!?..
I just hope so...

Certainly the message is far more important than the form...and when it comes to poetry the stirring feelings also count.

Thank you soooo much kind sir for your wonderful kind comment.It is certainly thrilling to know that you think that way.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Sven~
I hope to continue doing so dear friend. Bieng here has certainly had its effect on my writings and my developing my skills thanks to wonderful friends and poets such as yourself.

Thank you...

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catalinamoon
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8 posted 2001-10-21 04:56 PM


Oh how beautiful, I would love to have these roses brought to me, wrapped in his tie. This is a very heart touching poem.
Sandra

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9 posted 2001-10-21 05:33 PM


enjoy
MARK V SHELDON
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10 posted 2001-10-21 07:46 PM


This time, the meaning rests with the reader...

-MVS

"Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..."  --THE MATRIX

http://www.davidicke.com/icke/index1c.html

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11 posted 2001-10-21 08:28 PM




(sigh) With such a beautiful loving heart like yours, you deserve the reddest roses kissed by dew, with a few extra yellow ones to represent the sunshine you are. (smiles) Sooooooooo beautifully romantic, I love it, sweet friend! (big hugggssssss) Soooooooo beautifully romantic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

MyEnchanted_Melody
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12 posted 2001-10-22 08:34 AM




~Sandra~

I hope you'd get those roses....

Thank you dearly sweet friend
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~vandana~

Thank you

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
~Mark~

Yep......and with the poet as well  

Thank you
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

~Noah~

Wow.....do I deserve all that?....
You are such a sweet angel....and you have really warmed my heart with such sweet words......
Thousands {{{{{{hugs}}}}}} to you with all love.  

Thank you from my  
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