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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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Determined downfall escorted out a harsh Summer acting as harbinger of cool, cleansed Fall. A non lethal Sun illuminated all as wind whisked a dirty cotton veil revealing as deep an azure heaven as a pure sky could yield. Gleaming orange Spanish tile aligned as braided hair atop whitewashed walls with windows framed in wrought iron. The black grillwork fronting each window and balcony cupped flower boxes, their occupants ignoring formality in individual billowed ballet. A raven alit on the herringbone brick, his last act in breaking his descent was to display a blue-black velvet fan. Aground his new form, that of a stiff necked Maltese ignored me keenly searching for advantage over small life or an easy carrion repast. Dragonflies, doubtless the inspiration for Mr. Sikorsky, altered their altitude freeing me the nuisance of mosquitos. Butterflies whose seeming aimlessness implies an existence void of schedual gleefully visit fauna found friendly and attractive. My own Autumn's light reveals increasing non-concern for anything more taxing than an eased life of observance and appreciation. Changing winds found healing coax relaxed breath as nature's fingers rush my hair. One last piece will modify from puzzle to complete life's work of art .....that would be sharing this with you. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Richard, this is absolutlely wonderful. Have I mentioned that Texans sure do write purty?  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Absolutely magnificent. Vivid imagery, interesting points of view. As usual, one which I will save. I especially liked those care-free billowing curtains, and those hovering hungry dragonflies. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
You share very well, puzzle pieces and the fit... you've garnered yet another fan, hopefully to send more flames flying upward in continued write... write on... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is exquisite! Great imagery and flow....enjoyed very much. ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I felt I was at your side following your eyes as they watched all the beauty around you then I felt my heart tug as I saw the sadness of not having her to share it with reflected in your eyes. This heartfelt poem sings so perfectly that the vision of it comes clearly to the very heart of your reader. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yet another piece of excellent writing. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Oh, I will read this more than once. This touched me so deeply and you know I really don't know why. I can't put my finger on it but it had a feeling to it, as if the seasons had suddenly come alive and were speaking just to me! And the imagery was colorful and fresh. Thank you for an inspiring piece. -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Very lovely descriptions in this piece. I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing. smiles ~Marie~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
No one...self exiled to a Gulag could possibly write words as well as you have these. The Imagery is fantastic and your vocabulary is superb. Thank you for a beautiful read. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
You certainly do have a way with words. Great images here, My own Autumn's light reveals increasing non-concern for anything more taxing than an eased life of observance and appreciation. And you observe very well sir!!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Richard I could not take one piece of this poem and display it as the best, for the entire piece was simply exquisite. You know that I think there is no one like you for painting images, and the longing in the last line actually stung my heart. What a beautiful piece and one I have kept as my absolute favorite of yours now. This was without a doubt the most beautiful piece of writing and imagery I had seen in a long, long time. I wish you and Martie, Janet Marie, or Decaflame would write one together - now that would be something! ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Determined downfall escorted out a harsh Summer acting as harbinger of cool, cleansed Fall. A non lethal Sun illuminated all as wind whisked a dirty cotton veil revealing as deep an azure heaven as a pure sky could yield. ============================== The black grillwork fronting each window and balcony cupped flower boxes, their occupants ignoring formality in individual billowed ballet. A raven alit on the herringbone brick, his last act in breaking his descent was to display a blue-black velvet fan. ================================= My own Autumn's light reveals increasing non-concern for anything more taxing than an eased life of observance and appreciation. Changing winds found healing coax relaxed breath as nature's fingers rush my hair. One last piece will modify from puzzle to complete life's work of art .....that would be sharing this with you. ==================================== and so you have shared it with us... very very cool poem of imagery, analogy and metaphor Richard... there were several lines and images that made me smile at your clever writing and your intention of thought... Perhaps a change of season is what we needed *smile* very well done poet sir...thank you for sharing this days journey with me (beautiful butterfly)  This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Talk about change! Wow, Richard love the new look! You look great in a little "change", and sometimes a little change does us all some good ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You do change so well!!!!! Each vision has your personal signature of verse. Being the only thing consistent...you offer it gently and it makes one compelled to the threshold like no other. So glad you shared this with us. Sincerely, Regina |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is incredible... and thoroughly enjoyable. *S* I love the imagery and alliteration you've used... well done! |
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