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Temptress
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0 posted 2001-10-15 01:00 AM


Never mine to hold and love
although the day will come
when I might have only you.
I fell from the grace of belief
when you broke my heart
and fluttered back up into the sunlight
when I wanted to mend yours.
The mending can't be done by me
and I must realize that you are fleeting
although I am ready to take that chance.
I want to be your possession of tenderness
enclosed in your arms just being myself
but the dream we share is fragile solidity.
Dust me now in the inquiry of your need
and ask me gentle questions
in the most rare place
where spirits join hands for a moment or more.
Take your key (the one that glows with my love)
and turn it in the lock of the Gate Of Dreams
while I stand in keep
over a realm I built especially for love to dwell.
Follow a special path with just your name
ensnared into its breath of lushly watered life.
Be entangled in the joy of loving me
as I will be surrounding you in welcome.



Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

[This message has been edited by Temptress (edited 10-15-2001).]

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2001-10-15 01:13 AM


WOW! You have such incredible talent. This will be one of my favorites.

'Be entangled in the joy of loving me
as I will be surrounding you in welcome.'

An unbelievably good line.


cottage
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2 posted 2001-10-15 05:19 AM


I truly enjoyed this.  Your words are beautiful temptress.



cottage

WRBreezin
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3 posted 2001-10-15 07:23 AM



Love songs in each line...pure and lovely.

Willie B

Jon Mewett
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4 posted 2001-10-15 07:38 AM


A most beautiful love song.

Stay warm

jon

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5 posted 2001-10-15 08:56 AM


The mending can't be done by me
and I must realize that you are fleeting
although I am ready to take that chance.
I want to be your possession of tenderness
enclosed in your arms just being myself
but the dream we share is fragile solidity.
Dust me now in the inquiry of your need
and ask me gentle questions
in the most rare place
you again show your talent for expressing what can be complex emotions....


very nicely done...

Startime
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6 posted 2001-10-15 10:07 AM


You hold your arms open wide to receive him still knowing that you cannot heal him. Magnificent. Your love can give him the strength he needs. BRAVO!!!This poem is beautiful and filled with tenderness.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Auguste
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By the sea
7 posted 2001-10-15 12:37 PM


A lot of great imagery in this piece, Jennifer.  You make mushy work very well.  Personally, I'd like to see more of this kind of work from you. *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

Sven
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8 posted 2001-10-22 12:30 PM


I didn't respond to this???  

how could I not have???  it's wonderful. . . your heart speaks so softly. . .I'd like to see more of this from you as well. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Logan
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9 posted 2001-10-22 12:55 PM


Ahh, gentle one, your heart is showing with all the fineness of you. Lovely write and feel...very gentle smile
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10 posted 2001-10-22 01:27 PM


Temptress,

I am feeling this right along with you. I've been through many of the same things.

                                     Dawn

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In Your Poetic Mind
11 posted 2001-10-22 05:13 PM


Dust me now in the inquiry of your need
and ask me gentle questions
in the most rare place
where spirits join hands for a moment or more"


This is fantastic....the emotion I got just from these lines was so powerful...wow Temp...your work is talent...poetry indeed...


Lauren

I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01


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12 posted 2001-10-22 07:55 PM


and he's a fool if he doesn't get down on his knees and kiss your feet right?     

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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