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Mother, I wrote a lullaby
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Mother, I wrote a lullaby |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Mother, I wrote a lullaby For these nights when you cry I wrote it when you thought I slept I tore it from the tears you wept I also reached for the sounds Crashing glass unto the ground Mother, as we wake, you sing Good morning son, may this day bring… How do you live the day on through? I see you’re lonely, I am too When you cry, I must too When you laugh, I’m with you But as your door shuts every night I wait in darkness deep in fright There’s the weight I cannot weather Our pain, so sharp it knits together Don’t shut me out... Mother Breathe Mother Breathe Let me in your room Let me in your womb We can go out to the café And have our double latte And maybe catch a honey I’m not vinegar ‘til you show But then I had a birthday And still I’m set at zero The clock is running out for you It’s a shame I’ll never know Just cry And I will too Just laugh And I’m with you Close that door each night And here we lay alone I’ll sing my song someday From a motel with a phone (Mother don't pretend I won't get a second chance to listen!) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
well done walt. . . a song to be sung. . . and heard. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Walt...James |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
'I wrote it when you thought I slept I tore it from the tears you wept' I really like these lines Walt....well written Stay warm Jon |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is so sweet Walt. Nice twist of the tables to sing a lullaby to your Mom. Very nicely done If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Heartfelt and beautifully said. I hope you read this to her......I am sure her heart was very touched by this tender lullaby. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
I wish I could have known her but her but I know this poem is not about her. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A lullaby for all of us, oh yuh... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Walt you may never know how much this one means to me---I'm saving this one. My mother is still not "my mother" after my father's death--and it looks like she never again will be either....HUGS to you with tears in eyes, THANK YOU. |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Very very good I really liked this.....J  Just me BREAKING FREE of the manifestations of MAN, cut the cords one by one, finding no understanding except from the most divine one, it's happening |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Walt - Bravo!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
gives me a feeling of sincerity. i like all the details about hearing mommy cry and son/daughter crying, hearing mommy laugh and son/daughter laugh. but i especially liked the part about going to the cafe for latte and picking up a honey 'cause "...I'm not vinegar 'til you show...." another fav... "...But then I had a birthday And still I’m set at zero The clock is running out for you It’s a shame I’ll never know..." good job! [This message has been edited by cruz (edited 10-17-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ I got such a feeling of overwhelming sadness reading this~ Well written ... very touchy-feely.  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Walt, not what I expected from you. Usually I am laughing so much I can't reply. Enjoyed, even if it is sad. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
Walt, This makes me think....alot...thank you, sad but I enjoyed the read very much...hugs to you! Cindi |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
This side of you wakes the anguish in my heart Walt. I can feel the concern and grown-up struggle to comfort Mom. To care for her this way and to try to ease the pain..a task for a child who may not understand the complexity of it..but still innocently try. Heartwarming to say the least. Thank you for sharing this. Sincerely, Regina |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Walt- You just amaze me...this is lovely. What a tender and touching write. Very well done, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This is a side of you I quite like to see, the very caring, vulnerable and loving looney Walt! There are so many could relate to this poem Walt and thanks for writing anyone who does. ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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