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Sunshine
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0 posted 2001-10-14 08:29 AM


I Walked a Deserted Road
{revised}

in direction of north to south
an old stone bridge at one end
I walked a lonely road today
on it, found my spiritual friend

lined straight on either side of me,
hedge trees now shed of leave
kept their apples of lime green tight,
like balls hung on Christmas eve

here recent stains of “making way”
show up in machine’s road mark
I step mutely down the middle,
eyes rest on fresh scarred bark

abandoned long ago, this road,
it saw travelers of many kind
I heard faded voices of children
with chores and school on their mind

phantoms dressed in pant of denim
pale school dress of cotton twill
under morning’s sunlight gleam
their voice and laughter shrill

I see an ancient buckboard
tugged by stubborn mule
hear the ramrod’s lonely call
as he traveled in morning’s cool

with the sun upon my back,
I espied there in the brush
a white of tail, a doe, a buck,
whisk away through the bush

there, overhead, stretched a skeleton
cottonwood fingers scraping sky
never again dropping leaves to ground
awaits lightning’s strike to die

paw-prints in dirt’s damp below
gave view to hidden night’s life
in the ice of winter’s air
came his spirit emanating strife

I waited for the sound of him
it was there deep within my soul
would the wolf come man again
for either’s howl is whole

it was his search within my eyes
we spoke so, silently
he looked on toward the cottonwood
then disappeared quietly

sun was soon then covered
as winds blew in clouds of rain
I left those years of long ago
returning to the present again

this lone deserted road,
still, beneath my feet, just so
a decaying abandoned bridge,
rocked here, from years ago

takes my mind a’journeying,
whisks my breath away
I wonder the wander of “them,”
and at the lives that stay


©Karilea Rilling Jungel
revised 14 October 2001
circa 5 November 2000




[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 10-14-2001).]

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2001-10-14 08:38 AM


I wandered the road with you on this lovely  poem...whether revised or not...I sense there is always beauty felt from your words...

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Startime
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2 posted 2001-10-14 11:02 AM


I too wandered the road with you and saw a vision of such wonder that the silence sang with feelings of awe. This poem is so incredibly beautiful that I lost myself in the vision of it and had to read it 2 more times just to enjoy the feelings it gave me. Thank you so very much, Sunshine.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2001-10-14 11:09 AM


And what a wonderfully vivid journey this was Karilea .... thank you for this look into the past, very much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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4 posted 2001-10-14 11:13 AM


Untrafficed right of way allowing a clear view of wherever one's mind may wander. Such peace in such timeless settings. Enjoyed.
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5 posted 2001-10-14 11:33 AM


Sunshine- What a wonderful poem with great images. Memories of the heart make us travel back in time. Nicely done!  
``````````Warm hugs`````````

smiles ~Marie~

Keep the Faith

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