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Twister the Catastrophe
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Twister the Catastrophe |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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Omnipresent a marbleized fresco whirled in increasing frenzy, darkening in anger. Teared frustration uncontainable in the troposhere linked murmuring discontent. Atmosphere declaring war resounded a call to harm with luminous discharge. Tumultuous and cataclysmic deluge pummeled a dry earthen bulwark softening defenses. Thickened clouds constructed a mass configuration resembling an accusatory finger. Impoverished and discontent the terminal digit ignored complacent denizens, Ignored the predictable and circuitous grooves which was the music of their lives And as a too heavy Gram a Phone needle scarred forever the landscape of the world. Twister- a tornado Twister-a deceitful person [This message has been edited by RSWells (edited 10-14-2001).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Landscape - a scarred horizon... Landscape - a person's soul... Excellent, Mr. Wells... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I hear you... I've seen the remnants of both nature's twisters and mankind's as well. Nicely said, Richard..  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
hmm..I tried to stay away from this one...too anxious a morning to absorb catastrophes..but I couldn't..*s ~sighing ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RSWells~ 'Thickened clouds constructed a mass configuration resembling an accusatory finger.' WOW ! ... quite graphically done~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Clever write of analogy Richard... creative use of nature and imagery to make comparisons and define your intend. and Im most pleased to see your name here this morn..you & your poetry have been missed jm This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow....powerful....and yes, this can apply to people as well. They can tear apart lives as much as nature. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I rode one of those out once. He fizzled to a dry heave somewhere out there in Texas! LOL! Yep...he lives amongst you somewhere. I'm sure you'll know when he's around...when you catch the downwind of something raunchy and rank. Excellent as always!...and don't stay away so long...some of us have emerged! LOL. I was starting to have withdrawals! Missed you around here. PS. Thanks for the compliment! Sincerely, Regina |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
How can I do anything but keep saying what an awesome way with words and descriptions you have, sir? geesh! This is just WOW! *giggles* Can I have your autograph now so I won't long for it so much when you're famous?  Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Stunning in its perfection. Not only could I see this power of nature but I could feel it as it spent its anger upon the world it briefly touches. ABSOLUTELY MAGNIFICENT!! And you are perfectly right, a deceitful person can leave behind this kind of devastation as well..leaving destruction that never heals. I have a poem about a this kind of storm that I think I will post. It is not as good or powerful as yours but maybe a few will like it. Thank you so very much, for sharing this with me. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 Well Richard, it is Sunday, and I figured some sort of twister would appear, but there is no one that can personify or capture human emotions and "twist" and weave them into images with nature like you can. The beauty of it though, after any "twister" is over, the inhabitants have new choices.(I know, forever the optimist!) Wow, this is more like it - this was awesome Richard (got my widdle dictionary out twice) hah! hugs, so glad you are back, we all missed you here.~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow, your choice of words in this are like watching a movie!! I can see it very clearly, luckily from a safe distance. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"And as a too heavy Gram a Phone needle scarred forever the landscape of the world" RS --amazingly descriptive word choice and meaning's feel. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells, Well done good analogy. Enjoyed the read. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"And as a too heavy Gram a Phone needle scarred forever the landscape of the world." A wonderfully deep and descriptive piece absorbing both the human and natural aspects you've denoted. I've read this through several times looking from both vantages Richard, and this is truly an amazing write. Very well written indeed, I enjoyed the double perspective! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very well done! Enjoyed! ~Nancy~ |
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