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0 posted 2001-10-13 08:28 PM



           Exposed

Why do you often
stare at me -
Like I've clearly
lost my mind?
What makes you
walk so fast -
That I'm unfairly
left behind?
How can you escape
my kiss -
When you are
about to leave?
Are you repulsed
by the dress I wear -
The one with
my heart upon its sleeve?

© Copyright 2001 Chris Barker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-13 08:31 PM


Ouch. This sounds like a prelude to an ending.
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2 posted 2001-10-13 08:34 PM


Oh Chris!!  Some heavy thoughts to ponder here tonight...
These being just some of them.
How many of us ask these same questions?
Got me thinking girl!!
Well done, love ya, 'Teed.'  

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~
  

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3 posted 2001-10-13 08:48 PM


Midnitesun - not to worry, after all, beginnings are so much more fun than endings.
NancyLee, I don't know where my thoughts go sometimes...oh well, you know me.
Thankyou both for commenting.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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4 posted 2001-10-13 09:11 PM


WOW!!!You have truly brought to words the questions many of us have asked ourselves. I can feel this poem strongly...my weakness is that I too often wear my heart on my sleeve. Great work.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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5 posted 2001-10-13 10:52 PM


Startime, Thankyou for your welcome comments. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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6 posted 2001-10-13 11:14 PM


Wow, this is an amazing poem. Such power of feeling packed into those few lines.

Are you repulsed
by the dress I wear -
The one with
my heart upon its sleeve?

Those last lines really, really got me. Great writing

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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7 posted 2001-10-14 09:16 AM


Tracey - Thankyou so much for reading and commenting. My muse has either been tired, or reluctant to write lately. There are so many fine poets out here - I am a little "pen-shy." Hugs, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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8 posted 2001-10-14 08:10 PM


a powerful ending, Nightshade  
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9 posted 2001-10-14 08:14 PM


loved your play on words  




-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-14-2001).]

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10 posted 2001-10-14 09:18 PM


Very eloquent, perhaps this person is not good enough for you!

Cor

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11 posted 2001-10-14 09:46 PM


Balladeer - Thankyou dear poet for your response. Chris

Lady - How sweet of you to include a picture of Nightshade...always wondered what it looked like. Thankyou

Corinne - Not to worry - this was just some thoughts that my little muse eased into my being. Thankyou, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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12 posted 2001-11-03 11:30 AM



This is fresh, a new play on old words...Just Great!

Willie B

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13 posted 2001-11-03 04:44 PM


Willie B - I am glad you took the time to read this and to comment. Thanks, Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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