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Elizabeth

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0 posted 2001-10-12 10:23 PM

Nearer comes the nightfall
At the end of one slave's day
He hears his master calling
And tries to run away.
But the master is in power
As he has been from the start.
The two are intertwined now
And they cannot come apart.

Thoughts of freedom fill the slave's mind
But he knows that cannot be
Though others fought and won the battle
He thinks, "It's not to be."
If only he could turn back time
To when he met his fate
He would have chosen differently
But now it is too late.

The slave now grabs the needle
And sticks it in his vein.
He cannot resist his master
And his master is his bane.
The air is slowly growing cold
And day's becoming night
While the slave is growing tired
And will lose the will to fight.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2001-10-12 10:26 PM

Elizabeth....this surprised me...

I guess poetry is like that though, you think an experience is your own, and you read it and relive it, and there is both relief and anguish in the company of understanding. My applause, to you, dear lady.

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-10-13 12:52 PM

excellent. . .

a powerful portrait. . . and an all too real one. . .

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SEA

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with you

3 posted 2001-10-13 12:55 PM

we all have our own masters...in one form or another....this is awesome Elizabeth....

rwood
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Posts 3793
Tennessee

4 posted 2001-10-13 08:09 AM

You do bring one inside your mind. You seem to experience the very actions of the character. A really grasping piece of work here. I only know one Master...and I hate that anyone ever had to answer to another. Moving verse Elizabeth!

Sincerely,
Regina

[This message has been edited by rwood (edited 10-13-2001).]

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-10-13 08:16 AM

You know, Elizabeth, this head has two faces...I attended a seminar on Diabetes the other day...and when I read this, thought again of what I had learned of that dreaded disease...

two heads, indeed...

Thank you for this!

Denise

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6 posted 2001-10-13 09:43 AM

Excellent expression, Elizabeth. Very well stated. It's always nice to see a poem by you!

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

7 posted 2001-10-13 10:12 AM

At first,  I thought of slavery in the sense
known too well.  Then it became so clear
which master you wrote of.  This is a very
powerful and true poem.  I am glad this has
never been my master.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2001-10-13 11:13 AM

Elizabeth,
Strong words, good poem.

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC

9 posted 2001-10-13 03:16 PM

Elizabeth-

powerful write..and a little
shocking too...you have brought
this subject to light and in a very
thought provoking way! excellent...

take care.
amy

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

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