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Open Poetry #16

In twilight majesty

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2001-10-12 08:23 PM

Do not forget my life
as this turns to dust
as the feelings erode
at the changes we lost

Do not forget my love
as this turns to night
as the covers are cold
at the next days light

do not forget my soul
as the wind takes away
as the stars cry out
at heavens last game

do not forget my eyes
as they turn to the ground
as they are covered for good
from the sights they have found.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

1 posted 2001-10-12 08:28 PM

your work is stunning....be well Peace...

Greeneyes~

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I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

2 posted 2001-10-13 02:23 AM

This was a good read!!!!!!!!!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2001-10-13 02:26 AM

Another good one, Michael. Especially this:

"do not forget my eyes
as they turn to the ground
as they are covered for good
from the sights they have found."

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

4 posted 2001-10-13 02:31 PM

A little different form for you in this one. Short, easy words not to mention the rhyme....fantastic.

But don't think for one moment that Passions is letting you go THAT easily. LOL

Me

It is a blessing to have wings for words and passion in pen.

Marina Crossley

Jenn E
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada

5 posted 2001-10-13 02:58 PM

Well, there is not a thing you have ever written that I haven't liked........but I loved the simplicity of this one.....
As Always
Jenn E

MyEnchanted_Melody
Senior Member

since 2001-05-30

Posts 1106
across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.

6 posted 2001-10-13 03:23 PM

A nice piece that certainly attracts with its simplicity.

And We won't forget ....

Thank you
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Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2001-10-13 03:44 PM

*sigh* how could you be forgotten when you write so well. This is a wonderful read. Very heartfelt.

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