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Far Sighted Loneliness
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Far Sighted Loneliness |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I would If arms could reach And heart was not so heavy Lift your face to me Not with the thoughts Of being an idol or Even clay footed a lover Instead To but pour into you Some small measure of the feelings So long carried in hidden pockets Unable To reach through my eyes into you I in myopic stumble try to find words To express and console the emptiness So inadequate the phrases To convey comfort or warmth To make you feel what my arms in fashion might Still… I try… Perhaps providing kindling For you to build a fire within your own words |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
If this were not the right combination of longing, and gratitude, I do not know what would be. This is wonderful. Indeed, this will start many fires for many, many poets. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
you have inspired me.....thank you, this is awesome!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt--If words can reach, and I know they can, yours have. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Cpat....this is very very special! Now to read what you inspired in Sea. Enjoyed! ~NancyLee~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Tender like cold palms before a fireplace... It's always a pleasure to return to your poetry, Ron. -MVS "Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..." --THE MATRIX |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ 'To but pour into you Some small measure of the feelings So long carried in hidden pockets' Just lovely~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Simply Beautiful, Captain... ~Tier |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You touch my heart...and funny, I was reading something in the park earlier today that this reminded me of....well, I'll e ya about it....but remind me, I tend to get "lost" on weekends! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Instead To but pour into you Some small measure of the feelings So long carried in hidden pockets Sometimes I think we are living parallel lives. I may say alot in a few words but you say all the things I can't find the words for. Do you have a fan club? lol |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Here now, I got off my lazy duff and found it--- The Clod and the Pebble "Love seeketh not Itself to please, Nor for itself have any care, But for another gives its ease, and builds a Heaven in Hell's despair." So sang a little Clod of Clay Trodden with the cattle's feet, But a Pebble of the brook Warbled out these meters meet: "Love seeketh only Self to please, To bind another to Its delight, Joys in another's loss of ease, and builds a Hell in Heaven's despite." From Songs of Experience by William Blake [1757-1827] I was gonna say I'd wish I'd written that, but I'd be pretty dead by now...grin? [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-13-2001).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
No...You see things very well up close. I squint my eyes at the sun shining through your wisdom...as the longing is always a part of the desire to reach out and "be" with the one you love. Sometimes you have to give them an eye opener! Once again you amaze me...I like it that way. Sincerely, Regina |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Capt Hair, This was a pleasure to read. This one is a keeper. *L* |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Cpat Hair, what a wonderful piece of writing you have presented to us today, your words allow us to imagine your own thoughts, to feel the compassion of one and the emptyness of another. I enjoyed this posting and will check out many more. Sincerely Rick |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
superbly written....This truly could change the feelings of another so dear. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
To but pour into you Some small measure of the feelings So long carried in hidden pockets" What a lovely thought...I love this whole poem. With words and thoughts like these, who wouldn't be comforted? You do have the power to provide kindling...your words always light up something in my heart! With that said, I'm going to go store this away to read again at a future time when I need some rekindling  Hugs, ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too [This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 10-13-2001).] |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Instead To but pour into you Some small measure of the feelings So long carried in hidden pockets ------------- Still… I try… Perhaps providing kindling For you to build a fire within your own words -------------------------- I have truly loved this piece.....emotions so eloquently expressed with such lovely unique images and thoughts. It would certainly go to my library. Thank you dearly for sharing it ******************************** |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Your words light fires in the hearts of any who read them. This is beautiful and I loved reading it. Thank you, so much, for sharing it. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The title captured me... for it's a bleak horizon. *S* I would think these compassionate, caring words would make a world of difference to someone... sometimes, we just need a mirror not warped by our own lack of vision. *S* It's a beautiful poem, Cpat. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Oh my, but this is beautiful. I would If arms could reach And heart was not so heavy Lift your face to me I was hooked from those first lines and the poem just got better If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
'Tis beautiful, Sir. I cannot say much more, for I am overcome by the feeling of it. *sigh* Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
yet another.... ~Connie~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I'd say it was a very good "try". |
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