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When locking the doors just isn't enough
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When locking the doors just isn't enough |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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They've infected me with their agent Death doesn't feel so good I feel hate stirring inside of me And so I severed all I could I'm quite happy now Less means less to put up with I cut all my ties And I look good in a T My heart doesn't need four chambers to beat When locking the doors just isn't enough And every generation gots to get even more tough What's next? Listen to the scream of the plane above Was there a twinge of doubt? Crop dusters spreading fear And we all get to do without (what do they feel when we drop packets of relief) But I'm happy Like the tree that giveth Eden is so far away And like everything I took for granted The genie said Be careful what you wish for I wish... I wish... I was far away... [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-12-2001).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Don't we all. But....you and I have the fortitude to look it in the eye and say WOW! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
When you find that golden door to Eden, be prepared for the crowds to come pouring in...stampede style. I enjoyed reading your perspective, wayoutwalt. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ 'And like everything I took for granted The genie said Be careful what you wish for I wish... I wish... I was far away...' Right now ... don't we all~ Well said, my friend~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
very well expressed walt |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I like this Walty, very much  Maree |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
great job walt. . . I wish. . . that I was here. . . --------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Yes...far and away...but so glad we are here the same. Your verse made me think about so many things...such as the old Home Sweet Home....I still hope. Really great write! Sincerely, Regina |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
Be careful what you wish for indeed! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"My heart doesn't need four chambers to beat" great line!! the whole pome rocks hard and i wish i was far away, too |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
your poetry is so compact!! everything that needs to be addressed is, and the fact that humor still exists is so real! youdidagoodjob... 2 CRITICALLY AWESOME STANZAS... But I'm happy Like the tree that giveth Eden is so far away I wish... I wish... I was far away... [This message has been edited by cruz (edited 10-13-2001).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
But far away from what? Therein lies the question. Well said, walt... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
The tree that giveth I refer to is the tree in the garden of Eden that got Adam and Eve booted out. Also the giving tree in Shel Silverstein's tale. Thank you all. |
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