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I am better on paper

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Duncan
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0 posted 10-11-2001 11:11 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Duncan



Your photograph

still affords me
a moment of delusion

just long enough
to fleetingly embrace
the narcotic dream of us.

You are beautiful..

I am better on paper

this time
letís leave me there.
© Copyright 2001 Duncan - All Rights Reserved
Balladeer
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1 posted 10-11-2001 11:14 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Fantastic, duncan! We are ALL better on paper!  
Heather Miller
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2 posted 10-11-2001 11:15 PM       View Profile for Heather Miller   Email Heather Miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Heather Miller's Home Page   View IP for Heather Miller

AMEN to that one.
I can express self better on paper than face to face!!!!
Heather (CherokeeGirl)


Without the experiance of love where would we be? We would have no memories to cherish.
With love it brings hurt with hurt bittersweet memories.

[This message has been edited by Heather Miller (edited 10-11-2001).]

Tracey
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Speak for yourself Baladeer, I'm better in person (particularly after a few beers!!! lol)

Seriously Duncan, this is another perfect piece of writing from your heart. I do so enjoy reading your poems. You manage to pack such depth of feeling into such a short piece. Simply wonderful again (and somehow, though your writing is wonderful on paper, I think you'd be better in person  

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

[This message has been edited by Tracey (edited 10-11-2001).]

Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


4 posted 10-11-2001 11:16 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Very profound and enjoyable write Duncan!!

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~
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LoveLetters
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5 posted 10-11-2001 11:32 PM       View Profile for LoveLetters   Email LoveLetters   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LoveLetters

I have a friend who says this all the time. I echo Balladeer. We are all better on paper. I'll add my own thoughts too. What we put on paper is often a part of us, so at least it does exist.  I loved this.

Love has many masks. I am but one of them.

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6 posted 10-11-2001 11:51 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

A picture is worth a thousand words.
Your poems say a whole lot more, but with less words.
Sven
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7 posted 10-12-2001 12:58 AM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

why is that???  why are we better on paper??

I'd like to be better off paper. . .

well done Duncan. . .

------------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

SmittenKitten
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So true...you've expressed this phenomenon (I hate that word...it's so hard to spell!) perfectly  

Hugs,
~Krista  


Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.††
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

[This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 10-12-2001).]

1slick_lady
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great poem...i'm better on paper too...and i'm with sven...wish i wasn't!!!helen
Sinister Handed
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Hey, you guys are lucky.
I'm only "better in theory".  
Great poem.
Irish Rose
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11 posted 10-12-2001 08:22 AM       View Profile for Irish Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Irish Rose

You know you are right!

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"

"Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently."

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12 posted 10-12-2001 08:36 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

Duncan..again you show us the talent to say so much in so few words... very nicely done Sir... nicely done indeed.
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Love letters only, yes?  Your brevity remains striking, as always, gives so much in such thin lines...
Apachecat906
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Awesome poem Duncan.  Although I suspect you've got your good points in person, too.  I'd be willing to take you off the page for a moment  

This one I think I'll put on my "Best Poems" shelf.

A Whisper's Caress
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Your photograph

still affords me
a moment of delusion
let me just sigh....

Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul....

Marge Tindal
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Duncan~
Wonderful snapshot~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
   noles1@totcon.com   †††††††††††

Seymour Tabin
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Duncan,
Quite often true, excellent write.
walker
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I'm sure you're good in person too. There is always a desire in us to be what we were before. Doesn't our past always seem better than what we have right now. Our mind works that way. Great poem.
Magnus
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19 posted 10-12-2001 04:32 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Very well written,  I can relate....Paper
is where I express myself best.  My wife
can testify to that.
Charisma
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20 posted 10-12-2001 04:54 PM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

You know it and captured it very well....Well done!

Charisma

Suetang
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I agree totally with you on this Duncan.  A great piece of writing.
Take care....Sue

Suetang

Tiersdin
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Wow!

Awesome writing!

*smiles*

~Tier
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I swear, I love the way you write....
you always find a soft spot in my heart.  
this is so great  
vlraynes
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Duncan-
   Wow!  This is wonderful!
   VERY nicely said, my friend.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky


"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

 
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