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GhostWriter_6
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0 posted 2001-10-11 11:30 AM



Lyrical Amygdala Disruption

Complete Intent to harm with verbs and nouns
Unrestricted, understandable sounds,
Lyrical lacerations in my publications,
If your feelings are hurt from what you read
That was the intended relation.
Spoken with complete intent to damage your ego,
To break down your aristocratic placement of people.
If my words were elements; I would be fire,
Spitting flames to char your exterior: burning down your entire empire.
There are no wasted words when I speak,
Responses are unique,
You get what you seek.
If you constantly push my buttons, prepare to get what you paid for,
Pre-paid… no C.O.D.
If you don’t understand.. Then check your receipt.


© Copyright 2001 Antonio Marquis Bankhead - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-11 11:42 AM


what a fantastic way to convey these feelings! You did goooood   I like this  
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2 posted 2001-10-11 11:53 AM



GW...how brilliantly you tell people to get off your back!  Well done!

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3 posted 2001-10-11 12:01 PM


Ghost,
An interesting write and read. Enjoyed

Domzi
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4 posted 2001-10-11 04:24 PM


Oh snap you are the lucky winner of my
100th POST!
On the real though, this poem grabbed
me by my braids! You always speak the
truth through your pen. Keep it up!

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

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5 posted 2001-10-11 04:38 PM


Now ask me if I absolutely loved this one, you bet I did and saved it.  Great write, and that's the way to do it, make it "their stuff" not yours!

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

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6 posted 2001-10-11 04:46 PM


Ghost, I like this in-your-face honesty. Fighting words..."lyrical lacerations" and  "spitting flames."
GhostWriter_6
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7 posted 2001-10-11 05:20 PM


Wow.. i wasnt too sure people would seem to like this one.. but i guess my thoughts were wrong.... yeah .. and domzi thanx for making me your 100th post.... i am far behind you.. i need to step up my game....

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8 posted 2001-10-11 10:19 PM


You certainly get your feelings out well on this piece!!! It makes a very strong statement. Such an interesting piece of writing

PS.  What the hell is an amygdala anyway????

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

[This message has been edited by Tracey (edited 10-11-2001).]

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9 posted 2001-10-11 11:01 PM


We have a group down here called "Spoken Word"...performance poetry. This would be perfect for something like that....very well done, sir  
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10 posted 2001-10-12 01:09 AM


I know this poem had a bizarre title...ok this is to clear up what an amygdala is

Amygdala: the frontal lobe part of your brain that controls bad behaviors and stuff... basically it keeps you from saying inappropriate stuff at inappropriate times..

Knowledge Is Power


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