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Magnus
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0 posted 2001-10-11 10:54 AM


In the still of the moment, I lie awake.
Feeling some of the loneliness of a love not here.
Wishing we were together as one.
Laughing, playing, running, smiling, teasing.
Touching in a teasing way only lover’s know.

I miss your touch, your tenderness eludes me.
I miss your laughter ringing in my ears.
I miss those moments that only we have shared.
I cry sadly, salted  falling tears.

Your absence scars my soul with pining pain.
My voice, hoarse from silent screams escapes me.
I can only tell you in my mind I love you, I care.
Your presence strong in my heart,   I love you so.

When I first met you, you entranced me with your wisdom.
You knew my every thought, my next move, emotion.
I speak, you say I know, how can you?
I think, you answer before my mouth has said.
I hurt, you console me before I have felt the pain.
I need you now,   will you please come in,
come in from my dreams.


© Copyright 2001 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-11 10:57 AM


I LOVE this!!!

Live today as if it's your last.  Love today as if it's your first.   Lisa

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2 posted 2001-10-11 10:58 AM



...come in from my dreams...sounds like a welcome invite to one's love...

well done!

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3 posted 2001-10-11 10:58 AM


So many wonderful lines in this beautiful piece. Tenderness and longing flow with such grace.

Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul....

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4 posted 2001-10-11 10:59 AM


These are some bittersweet but heartfelt words... though I particularly like the finale - Nicely done..
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5 posted 2001-10-11 10:59 AM


You are welcome....I enjoy writing like this.
You will find romance something I enjoy.

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6 posted 2001-10-11 10:59 AM


full of tender emotions.....I understand this  
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7 posted 2001-10-11 11:01 AM


Nan,  Whispers,  Sunshine....

thank you for your comments....You will find
that I thoroughly enjoy this type of poetry.
It may be my own style...but I enjoy every bit of it.

Magnus
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8 posted 2001-10-11 11:02 AM


thank you Sea.....glad you understand and
enjoyed the read......

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9 posted 2001-10-11 12:14 PM


This is wonderfully written.  And, I do love this style....
*sigh* romantic poems always get to me.  ~NancyLee~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~
  

Magnus
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10 posted 2001-10-11 12:42 PM


Thank you Nancy Lee...I have written many
poems of this type....and I will share some
over the next days.

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11 posted 2001-10-11 01:06 PM


LOVELY~

I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 10-11-2001).]

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12 posted 2001-10-11 01:32 PM



"will you please come in,
come in from my dreams."


Magnus~ What a soft and heart-wrenching plea...I know this feeling well.

Hugs,
~Krista  

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Magnus
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13 posted 2001-10-11 01:59 PM


thanx Krista,  Greeneyes,

this is one of my favorite styles of poetry.
I hope you continue to enjoy them.

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14 posted 2001-10-11 10:01 PM


An enchantingly beautiful piece.  Welcome, I look forward to seeing more from your lovely pen

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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15 posted 2001-10-13 09:16 AM


thanx Tracey,  sorry i had not commented before now.
You will see more of my words....

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