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dance of the fool's feet
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dance of the fool's feet |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I want to take myself into never and ever and then wherever come back again and dance in glimpse and dash of soul the eye will smile in blush (again?) in that guarded moment-- bared-- simple silence of aware and glance of chance-- planned happenstance spontaneous of thoughts in dance Dance with me? (oh, dance with me?) Could you, would you, kiss me? Please? fingertips upon my back... kisses--liquid, train-on-track- shivered electricity-- enough to drop me to my knees. Silken satin succulence... What is the ending to "enough?" Please...I beg you meet my eye, there is no better way to die... please (i whisper) come inside teasing hither (come alive) A Dance! A Spark! A Tambourine! A ribbon twined and uncried scream... and spices in the air give haunt the gypsy dance is more than taunt... She is the challenge-- serpent's greet... a dagger's danger at your feet dancing in infinity figure eight curled round fool's feet. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-11-2001).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow Karen! Speechless here. Maree  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nicely done...you are *sparked* even if in words only ~wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Dance with me? (oh, dance with me?) Could you, would you, kiss me? Please?" "Silken satin succulence... What is the ending to "enough?" Bravo!!! Oh, I just loved this Serenity! The flow is simply superb! It dances along in tune with your sentiments ... from internal rhymes to alliteration, the whole piece is a beautifully rhythmic adventure. I've read this several times over ... VERY much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
I do love the way you write. This is such a flowing, rythmic piece, with such moving thoughts. Beautiful. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Dance with me? (oh, dance with me?) Could you, would you, kiss me? Please? fingertips upon my back... kisses--liquid, train-on-track- shivered electricity-- enough to drop me to my knees. Silken satin succulence... What is the ending to "enough?" Please...I beg you meet my eye, there is no better way to die... please (i whisper) come inside teasing hither (come alive) A Dance! A Spark! A Tambourine! A ribbon twined and uncried scream... and spices in the air give haunt the gypsy dance is more than taunt... =========================================== I do so love when you dance and cast spells of rhyme divine..... this is absolutely awesome Sen. Must be read aloud!! Here I stand like it matters... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yup, JM is right, you definitely have to read this one aloud to fully appreciate it. Now I loved it (don't understand the mechanics like Kit does) but man, I loved it! Bravo sweetie! ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Whew, I think I am speechless after that. What a tumultuos and sensual poem. Sandra |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
fools feet dance? Then I dear lady should be as light of foot as I am dense of head... Very nice |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Unbelievable!! Fantastic writing....enjoyed! ~Hugs, Nancy Lee~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I don't know what you've been eating. . . but don't stop. . . this is excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Luscious Maree....I DO have my moods!  Sometimes they even leave me speechless.... But thank you for your loveliness, it's much appreciated!wynter...sparked? more like reaching a flashpoint! But yes, it's quite the blissful agony...thank you as well! Kit, your critique means much to me, as I DO try to employ the tools so generously taught me by the "elders" here at passions, I thank you for noticing and for your you heart high praise...hand over heart bow of gratitude to you! Trace...that's a genuine lovely compliment and I thank you much! It's part of why I write, and I am so grateful for you letting me know. JM....me's in a dangerous mood of late...in a quandary as to incant or RECANT....but it is what it is...and I love you for being here...hope all is well! HUGS.... Sharon...most of my stuff, as I think I've told you I actually sing as I write, so thus it tends to lyricism---and hey, I hope you know how special I think YOU are....smiles...hope you are healing! Ron? With me as a partner? All you have to do is show up! Thank you m'friend!sandra...I think I am too tumultously sensual...scary at times!!!!  thank you lovie!Nance....thank you as well, I'm glad you are enjoying my poetry...it's been more of an excorcism of late, but again, it is what it is....smiles and thanks. Sven? I've told ya a million times....GINSENG! AND STOP? Bwahahahaha...Thanks all, with love and gratitude...... |
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