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cottage
Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 138

0 posted 2001-10-11 02:12 AM

Beneath and Within

A true personality behind a veil
Of false name packaged with fear
Knew not what to seek
Afraid of what would speak

You wrote your way to my soul
Words that traded you
And your willingness to feel
Unpretentious, so true…

Slowly I peeled myself
Of my secrets, fears and dreams
Cause I knew you were capable
Of knowing me, completely

Yet restrained indeed I was
Torn between a choice
To reveal how this heart had grown
With you residing deep within

You had lifted me up again
Thru’ a whirlwind of passion
And a love of hopes
That was never ending, always lingering

Alas, I’ve stopped wondering
About this other world you mentioned
And I’ve prayed that things could happen
In places other than dreams

[This message has been edited by cottage (edited 10-11-2001).]

LoveLetters
Junior Member

since 2001-10-09

Posts 35
State of Hope

1 posted 2001-10-11 02:32 AM

Ohh..I know this feeling. Keep praying. It happens! I enjoyed this!

Love has many masks. I am but one of them.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-10-11 10:50 AM

I like this so much......

"One of the hardest things in life is having words in your heart that you
can't utter". ~James Earl Jones

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2001-10-11 11:03 AM

Slowly I peeled myself
Of my secrets, fears and dreams
Cos I knew u were capable
Of knowing me, completely

I loved this verse..then the further I read, I decided........I loved them all. Thank you

~Wynter...I am saving this one, it is inspiring me this day..p.s. I dont like to add crtitiques..but it would be even more wonderful if the words 'Cause and you were written out

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2001-10-11 11:12 AM

I like your title...and oftentimes, writing is just that, peeling a way through to the truth....

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2001-10-11 11:24 AM

We often all feel that some things in dreams
would be so wonderful if they were true.
This internet enhances and magnifies that.
I hope your dream,  if is yours.....becomes
a reality.  This is well said and written.

cottage
Member

since 2001-06-21

Posts 138

6 posted 2001-10-11 08:48 PM

thank you everyone, glad that you've enjoyed this.

Wynter, thanks! I've made the amendments.

love,
cottage

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2001-10-12 01:25 AM

well done. . . I love the emotion in this one.. .

great job. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

8 posted 2001-10-12 06:22 AM

Word after Word...superb! This is a keeper for sure. That place exists. Believe. It comes slowly into view, layer by layer..especially when you can write like this! Beautiful!

Sincerely,
Regina

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