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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Tonight, I die as even, I, pull the trigger back. This night I cry in rivers dried... (this night I know no lack.) As a sword upon breastbone weary weight of ME, alone-- I live in fear of unatone-- I fear injustice of my slap. Even as I spin my hand, the blood of innocents demand-- seemingly simple reprimand-- I feel a need to chisel stone. Don't tell me that I brought this on... Don't tell me that I wrote this song. Don't tell me that--I'm just like you. Tell me? God forgives me too... Forgive me for misunderstand. Where do I draw a line in sand? Hitler, once, was just a man magnetized to murder throng. I stand before you. Witch, am I. All harm, I have ever denied... My vows deny my hand in this... yet anger curls my hand in fist. Not my children. Not like this. No kiss of such mishapen lips... and blood lust thrust of beastie hips-- in lust of lips that tell such lies. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Even as I spin my hand, the blood of innocents demand-- seemingly simple reprimand-- I feel a need to chisel stone. Don't tell me that I brought this on... Don't tell me that I wrote this song. Don't tell me that--I'm just like you. Tell me? God forgives me too... Forgive me for misunderstand. Where do I draw a line in sand? Hitler, once, was just a man magnetized to murder throng. I stand before you. Witch, am I. All harm, I have ever denied... My vows deny my hand in this... yet anger curls my hand in fist. ======================================= dont really know how to respond to this... cant compliment or critique such pain... cant deny it nor ignore it..... for I know all too well how both feel powerful rhymes..I hope the intended gets the message. You are poetry KA We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Sort of agree with JM. There is such beauty in you. Don't hide the flower, it is full of power. *L* Sy |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
interesting write. the emotions are palpable and the concerns real... ever denied a very fitting title.... |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
WOW Once again your poetry leaves me speechless. This one is hard to turn away from |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
You should already know what I have to say. You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you have beastie hips?  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I felt each bit of the indignity in being part of something one does not want to be a part of, and this makes it a great poem. ~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
do not deny the vows of old. . . for they are the things that make you what and who you are. . . this pain comes from within. . .and is well shown here. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
WOW... I'm speechless sweetSerenity... An awesome write PoetFriend... *~coco~* |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
So much said here, and I don't know if I got the entire clear message, but such strong emotion coming through. Take care, wonderful witch. Sandra [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 10-28-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
very graphic, this is raw poetry, taking risks, I love it! Kathleen |
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