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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-10-06 12:07 PM

I Am Not A Fairy Tale

I am weakened
by each breath I take,
the uncertainty in the air
filling me to capacity.
I pause momentarily, to rest
belaboring this rhythm,
the flow blocked at times
by the pulsating of thoughts.
The throbbing reaches inward,
grasping a lonely heart
as I try to analyze the state I am in.

I am susceptible
to your every movement,
exhausted by your capture,
sensitive to your stimulation,
unbalanced by your every touch.
Tinged by each stroke of your hand,
I am warmed in the color blush,
as you strike a chord within me.
A twist of fate, to bind me
to the fabric of you.

I am marginal,
able only to demonstrate
the dances of my past,
a life failed, revealing a part of me,
a glimpse into the sheerness of a soul
to be scrutinized, perused,
by eyes expecting more;
perhaps a fantasy.

I am not a fairy tale
or a mind's eye creativity.
I am a rainbow in disguise.
Colored by life, shaded by my
displays of emotion, held up to your view,
exposing when necessary
my arc, each bend, each curvature
that flexes, trying
to meet you halfway.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 10-06-2001).]

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-10-06 12:42 PM

"I am susceptible
to your every movement,
exhausted by your capture,
sensitive to your stimulation,
unbalanced by your every touch.
Tinged by each stroke of your hand,
I am warmed in the color blush,
as you strike a chord within me.
A twist of fate, to bind me
to the fabric of you."

WOW!!!! then, wow.........
I wish I wrote this part, it blows me away!!! I feel every word right into my bones. I have to keep this one....

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2001-10-06 01:03 PM

Excellent write,
But,
Although you might not be a fairy tale,
I believe some of the rest of us are.

Enjoyed the descriptive phrases.

Gloom

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2001-10-06 01:18 PM

Absolutely beautiful.
"I am a rainbow in disguise.
Colored by life, shaded by my
displays of emotion, held up to your view,
exposing when necessary
my arc, each bend, each curvature
that flexes, trying
to meet you halfway."

That's a lot further than many are willing to reach. You are an honest and open heart, and it is comforting to read words like this today. Thanks.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-10-06 01:47 PM

Wynter,
You are and you will. Enjoyed the write.

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

5 posted 2001-10-06 02:56 PM

An impactful write, Wynter. I feel that when one realizes the following passage:

I am marginal,
able only to demonstrate
the dances of my past,
a life failed, revealing a part of me,
a glimpse into the sheerness of a soul
to be scrutinized, perused,
by eyes expecting more;
perhaps a fantasy.

...it's time to reassess one's thresholds of tolerance and reanalyze one's motives, for no one should be a fantasy, or rather -- a set of expectations, if they choose not to be...

-MVS

"Learn to let go of fear, doubt, and disbelief..." --THE MATRIX

http://www.davidicke.com/icke/index1c.html

Joie de Vivre
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since 2001-09-29

Posts 21
USA

6 posted 2001-10-06 03:04 PM

The title itslef is capturing; your character has a spark inside that demands appearance, and your desription is visually magnetic. I believed in a princess held captive in her role, and yet, she tore herself from the fabrication. Wonderful.

Joie de Vivre
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since 2001-09-29

Posts 21
USA

7 posted 2001-10-06 03:05 PM

apologies for the typos above

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

8 posted 2001-10-06 03:51 PM

THIS is one of your best!!!

Topheth
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 297
Texas

9 posted 2001-10-06 03:53 PM

"A twist of fate, to bind me
to the fabric of you."

A completely pleasurable read.

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

10 posted 2001-10-06 06:46 PM

Oh my, you know that this one speaks to me. Excellent writing..
Sandra

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2001-10-06 06:59 PM

Wynter, this one captured me from the title and pulled me in until the end...then I just sat staring at the screen and saying....
WOW!!!!!
Absolutely one of your best...
if not the best. ~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

12 posted 2001-10-06 07:18 PM

Wynter,
shades of Labyrinth you write well...always.
Keth.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

13 posted 2001-10-06 08:06 PM

absolutely excellent writing!!

very fine, my friend!

Martie

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14 posted 2001-10-06 08:41 PM

I got chills when I read this...wonderfully done!

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

15 posted 2001-10-10 08:49 PM

SEA ..I love how you type  WOW...it  brings me to smile...you  may keep them and  use them any time you like Thank you SEA.

PGloom ...nice to read  a comment from you and I believe in fairy tales..I just  don't think I am one. *s

Midnitesun ...Thank you for reading..yes sometimes I am too honest and too open.

Sy...you make me want to take a deep breath and sigh and so I shall. *s thank you

MARK V SHELDON ..when I say I am not a fantasy..I mean that  I don't wish to be anyone's fantasy...I am real, marginal, but real and with that comes faults, mistakes, and sometimes failure.

Joie de Vivre ...thank you for your comments  and if you ever have  typos and wabt to correct them you click on the third symbol  to the right  and it will let you edit your response and or posting of poem.*s

The Lady of Shallot...thank you, but I hope my besy is yet to come ((hugss)) for brightening my day.

Topheth...nice to see you thanks for reading.

Sandra ...always a pleasure to please with words...thanks  romantic one *s

Nancy, thanks, I am not sure it is worthy of a WOW...but I do enjoy your  comments *s

Kethry dear, I always love to know you are nearby reading..thank you
((hugss))

doreen..an excellent from you, just makes my night even better. Thank you

Martie...funny thing is I get chills when I reread it too and I don't know why..but whenever I write a poem  for a few days  after I don't even remember writing it and  wonder where the words come from. Thank you Martie. I  enjoy  your poems immensely. huggs

Maureen

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

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