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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-10-03 04:11 PM

As ancient limbs
creaked in crown
with each stir of breeze
moonlight danced
to rhythms heard best
by laying hand on
swollen belly of
pregnant thoughts

Each step choreographed
through seasons of chance
now frenzied to completion
as leafs pant exhausted
on dangling stems hold

What season of woman
has heightened with passion
the souls lying here?

Watching unfolding dreams
my mind wanders again
to you

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-10-03 04:14 PM

...what season of woman...

I think you're intentionally trying to get all the ladies to flock to this one...

and I think you will succeed...

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2001-10-03 04:20 PM

"to rhythms heard best
by laying hand on
swollen belly of
pregnant thoughts" and "season of woman"

I love the female feeling of this..Wonderfully done!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-10-03 04:53 PM

This woman loved it!! ~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

4 posted 2001-10-03 05:26 PM

BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

5 posted 2001-10-03 05:29 PM

this is outstanding to say the very least....

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

6 posted 2001-10-03 06:31 PM

This is the kind of song that I enjoy from you most, Captain...

*smiles*

~Tier

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

7 posted 2001-10-04 12:06 PM

"as leafs pant exhausted
on dangling stems hold"

You've painted a picture of a scene I witnessed today but you did it in such a vivid and unique way...lovely...just lovely Ron.

Hugs,
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2001-10-04 12:30 PM

Each step choreographed
through seasons of chance
now frenzied to completion
as leafs pant exhausted
on dangling stems hold

What season of woman
has heightened with passion
the souls lying here?

Often when I read you, it is like suddenly having a poetic explanation for my recent past. This is one of those times.
And this is really an incredible poem.

Temptress

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

9 posted 2001-10-04 03:37 AM

This is indeed more beautiful work from you. I enjoy reading your work very very much, sir. The way this touched me is too exquisite to describe with just my words.

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

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