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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2001-10-03 02:36 PM


In bloodless flow
Life’s words dripped
Onto parch and paper
Staining the virgin
With obscene images
And degrading tale

Such loss
As was scribed
Met scribbled hope
Still...
the stains
From hands touching pure
Are left when all else
Is erased


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jellybeans
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1 posted 2001-10-03 02:49 PM


what a beautiful portrayal of life, blood mixed with hope...sigh....very nicely done  
Professor Gloom
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2 posted 2001-10-03 02:51 PM


An image once tarnished
Is hard to repair,
Once written upon,
Forever marred , white out is too white
Erasing leaves a blur of what was.
This is interesting image you present

Gloom

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3 posted 2001-10-03 02:51 PM



Out, out...no, wait. That's another poem.

Well done, Sir!

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4 posted 2001-10-03 02:55 PM


Well done Cpat!  Interesting concept!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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5 posted 2001-10-03 03:26 PM


Out damn Spot! Won't that dog ever be housebroken

V e r y  interesting write my friend.

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6 posted 2001-10-03 03:39 PM





cpalmer
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7 posted 2001-10-03 03:57 PM


Cpat,
Interesting way of looking at life...loved it!
Cindi

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8 posted 2001-10-03 04:32 PM


Once our innocence is lost, is gone. Great write, it makes me think of how I cover my eyes when there is a bloody or scary scene on a movie, I always want to protect my mind innocent of certain images. Thanks.
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9 posted 2001-10-03 05:47 PM


enjoy
sunshinemist
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10 posted 2001-10-03 06:14 PM


Cpat Hair,

Very interesting write. Enjoyed!!  

warm smiles,
Marie  

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11 posted 2001-10-04 04:03 AM


Sometimes I can't do anything but sit in awe over your work. I'm doing it right now. I loved this.  

Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence.

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12 posted 2001-10-04 07:57 AM


You write so well how things can be quietly tarnished and speak loudly the sorrow. One can always tell when something has been wronged...by the condition of the emptiness and the guard of it. Bravo!

Sincerely,
Regina

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13 posted 2001-10-04 05:51 PM


May I add "Bravo" also. Yes, stains....they never seem to completely come out do they?
This is wonderful.

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