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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I have to see myself from the outside in As a bag of flesh or a bottle of sin Unlike the point where I wish I could be I'm paralleled... no lining up with me Improbability stuck me up on this earth Now it would figure if I even had worth Some obscure film played once and in time Taken off the shelf as if charged of a crime No one to funnel me in this small adventure I’d chosen myself and became my own censure I’d like to dissolve this and broaden the scale Fossilize the remains of a genus so frail I'll look at myself from outside of the sin Where I have a chance to be still born again Racks of lamb pop into my brain waves just right I don't think I’ll be counting sheep tonight [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-03-2001).] |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
It's hard to judge others correctly and impossible to judge yourself as much... Thanks for the read. ~Krissie "No one has ever loved |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ 'I have to see myself from the outside in' And it's time for all of us to do just exactly that~ Depth charge here~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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cruz Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 282Dallas,Texas USA |
neatoh! i like the "no one to funnel me in this small adventure" part and also the following: I'll look at myself from outside of the sin Where I have a chance to be still born again Racks of lamb pop into my brain waves just right I don't think I’ll be counting sheep on this night awesome! |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
this is very, very entertaining  |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
AniKay and Marge hit the target...well done, Sir! |
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Twilight Myst Member
since 2001-10-04
Posts 58Just A Myst At Twilight |
Very thought provoking and an awesome read indeed!! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I am glad I didn't skip it! |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
It's not easy to look at ourselves from without, wayout... You're not as farout as you might think... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Walt- Much wisdom in these words, my friend. Very nicely penned. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you are an fine writer.... this, an awesome piece of poetry....... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I had alot to say on this one but I think it should be reworked big time! Thank you for all the boosts of confidence to try harder. The title was cuz (what it was cuz) I didn't want alot to read it yuh I rather they just skip it. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
wayoutwalt, This poem shouldn't be skipped. Painfully insightful. Not many go there. Fascinating. Thanks. Sin isn't fair, but God got even, grace isn't fair either. larry c [This message has been edited by Larry C (edited 10-11-2001).] |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You see things in a wonderful way. Very refreshing voice you have. A wise place to search. Inside. Most of us do skip that part. This was well worth reading! Sincerely, Regina |
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