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Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
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0 posted 2001-10-02 09:21 PM



Just In Case

Just in case...
you haven't noticed
haven't looked into the glass,
I have mirrored you in edges
have restored and framed in brass.
I have stared into the eyes of blue,
though tempted all the while,
I resist, withhold the want of you
and place you in minds file.

Just in case...
you need reminding
'bout the wrestling of desires,
I've imprisoned you, in vivid words,
in photopainted priors
holding onto all, especially,
caresses from your touch
I resist, withhold the want of you
though pressuring is much.

Just in case...
you think of me, a tease,
in panarama view
landscaped, guarding all there is
except from love that's true.
In retrospect, I reign in thoughts
of those that want to please.
I resist, withhold the want of you
with every breath I seize.

Just in case...
you think I'll change my mind
succumb to your intentions
I am purposeful, in meaning of
the sense of my directions.
I aim to view, in mirror, two
of faces you and I
and behold the feelings when expressed
in seeing eye to eye.

~A~



© Copyright 2001 Alicethruglass - All Rights Reserved
Songbird
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Missouri
1 posted 2001-10-02 09:40 PM


Enjoyed this very much..some very beautiful and unique lines.
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
2 posted 2001-10-02 09:41 PM


Excellent writing and such a strong message

Duncan
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3 posted 2001-10-03 12:21 PM


Just in case...
you need reminding
'bout the wrestling of desires,
I've imprisoned you, in vivid words,
in photopainted priors
holding onto all, especially,
caresses from your touch
I resist, withhold the want of you
though pressuring is much.

Wow!  Incredible write.  There is a comforting familiarity about this.

Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
Posts 368

4 posted 2001-10-04 05:31 AM


Songbird-thank you s~

Rex Allen McCoy-nice that you understood the message and thank you for reading

Duncan-Thank you for the Wow. it gave me a smile.

"There is a comforting familiarity about this." hmmm..I wonder why...

~A

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03
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5 posted 2001-10-06 03:54 PM


There's a lot in this one, an awful lot!
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
6 posted 2001-10-10 08:51 PM


Alice, such is love, filled with so many emotions.

~Wynter  


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II


[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 10-10-2001).]

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
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7 posted 2001-10-10 08:56 PM


Oh I love this!

Just in case...
you need reminding
'bout the wrestling of desires,
I've imprisoned you, in vivid words,
in photopainted priors


Excellent images!

Maree  

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
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8 posted 2001-10-10 09:02 PM


wonderful imagery, meter, cadence, and beauty....

very well written!

i have not read your work until now but will seek it out in the future.

welcome!!

Magnus
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9 posted 2001-10-10 09:07 PM


This is a very beautifully crafted poem...
I love the way that you put it together.  
and the words went together very well....
a nice and enjoyable read...thank you.

MyEnchanted_Melody
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since 2001-05-30
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across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be.
10 posted 2001-10-10 10:18 PM




Just in case...
you haven't noticed
haven't looked into the glass,
I have mirrored you in edges
have restored and framed in brass.
I have stared into the eyes of blue,
though tempted all the while,
I resist, withhold the want of you
and place you in minds file.

-------------------

A well-done beautifully painted and eloquently expressed piece....

I loved it and the part I quoted is just one of many I loved....

Thank you for sharing it
********************************

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
11 posted 2001-10-10 10:28 PM


STUNNINGLY BEAUTIFUL!!
INCREDIBLE WRITING!
Enjoyed, enjoyed, enjoyed.
~NancyLee~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~
  

cottage
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since 2001-06-21
Posts 138

12 posted 2001-10-11 01:53 AM


just in case u do not know...I truly love this poem.
Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19
Posts 368

13 posted 2001-10-16 10:58 AM


The Lady of Shallot, nt, Dark Angel, doreen peri, Magnus, MyEnchanted_Melody, NancyLee, and cottage... just in case you don't  realize it..I appreciate the comments and time you take to do so.

~A~
  



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