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Michael G Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579Nashville |
The walking shadow fell through the window above the cinder blocks that make you tingle The shadow came across to your heartbeat as your breath became shallow to ignite your needs Leave the world for a moment so you can feel how it becomes your larauls You never really understand your touch but the fault is within the way you follow The walking shadow fell through your fingers as you waited for you long term answer It came into your haunted soul that left you longing for that one love. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The shadow came across to your heartbeat as your breath became shallow to ignite your needs Leave the world for a moment so you can feel how it becomes your larauls You never really understand your touch but the fault is within the way you follow ================================= there isnt a line in this I dont love...or feel ... this is absolutely awesome MG ... good to see your name here tonite sweet poet of the wind. We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed, this is like that shadow. . . covering the dreams of the heart. . . superbly done. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
The walking shadow fell through your fingers as you waited for you long term answer It came into your haunted soul that left you longing for that one love. ******************************************* I especially enjoyed these words, powerful images and excellent expression.  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I like walking shadows..very nicely done *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Perfect, from start to finish. Marina |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MichaelG~ A captivating read~ 'You never really understand your touch but the fault is within the way you follow' Enjoyed this thought very much~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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