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HM3
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0 posted 2001-10-01 05:09 PM


Butterflies flutter by
A vision to behold

Taking flight in the light
Toward the leaves of gold

Baby boy, bundled joy
New love from up above

Big sigh of happiness
Exhaled in purest love

Flutter by lullaby
Baby Bret gently sleeps

Cradling him gently
As "Gram E" softly weeps

(Thanks Marge!)



Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching...


[This message has been edited by HM3 (edited 10-01-2001).]

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Domzi
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1 posted 2001-10-01 06:10 PM


Such a sweet lullaby.

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

Enchantress
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2 posted 2001-10-01 07:33 PM


Such a gentle lullaby for baby Bret.
Lovely...softly said.  Enjoyed, Nancy.


~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~
  

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3 posted 2001-10-01 07:48 PM


Awwww this lullaby is so sweet.
Thank you for sharing.. : )

HM3
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4 posted 2001-10-01 08:32 PM


If anyone can suggest how to make me feel better about this:

Harmonic happiness
A gentle turtledove

It seems out of place to me and I am thinking that it needs a rewrite or do over or something. It just doesn't seem to flow. . .

Suggestions anyone?

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2001-10-01 09:49 PM


HM3~
Because you asked~

How about-

Harmonic sigh of happiness
Exhaled in purest love


And .... it is lovely~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com            

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2008-04-27 10:37 AM


Wanda~
I am sorry for the circumstance, of the loss of your mother, that brings you back to us here ... but glad that you found your way 'home' and hoping you will share more with us as time moves along~

God bless and be with you all~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -             noles1@totcon.com

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