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Confusing Iambe

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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 10-01-2001 12:20 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Cpat Hair

I sat and watched as
Iambiís hands did
What I wished mine could.

Deftly they finger danced
Over wrench and socket
As she repaired Jimís International.

I rose and went to my truck,
Reached inside and pulled from the cooler
A cold beer, turned the ignition key
And adjusted the radio volume up
Then  returned
To the rough barked seat
I had taken earlier.

With a grunt
She slid out from under the frame
And started wiping her hands
On a grease rag that was as much grease as rag.

She looked my way with perplexed eyes.

I just stood up and began
In awkward steps to dance to the music.

I still donít danceÖ
But I am no longer afraid to try.

© Copyright 2001 Cpat Hair - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 10-01-2001 12:25 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


I applaud his tenacity....perhaps she will soften up a bit this time, and join the dance of him.
Enchantress
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2 posted 10-01-2001 01:14 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

YES!! And then.........?????
I sit here holding my breath, awaiting the next one.  I AM intrigued!


~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~
  

Duncan
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3 posted 10-01-2001 01:30 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

I am suddenly finding your brevity both perfect...and maddening.
SmittenKitten
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4 posted 10-01-2001 03:04 PM       View Profile for SmittenKitten   Email SmittenKitten   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmittenKitten's Home Page   View IP for SmittenKitten


Cpat~ hmm...I'm liking this series    it's addictive though...these little fragments are very tantalizing.  When do we get the big picture?  

Hugs,
~Krista  

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.††
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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5 posted 10-01-2001 03:35 PM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

Way to go, guy!  Right on!  I loved it, you rascal!
serenity blaze
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6 posted 10-01-2001 03:41 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Oh...and I am delighted!!!!!   and waving dollar bills at the dancer! You have made me smile TWICE today!!!!  
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7 posted 09-26-2002 02:00 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I think it's telling that her name is Iambi and not Iambe in this one.

And not just a typo, I hope.
Susan Caldwell
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Someone help me?  I can't find the first one....



"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

 
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