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Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith
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0 posted 2001-10-01 12:59 PM


I am sending this one out again because I feel that the revisions (though subtle) make this so much better than the original version. You be the judge.

The Proofs of Beauty
                       For Kelley

[I]

The first I saw of beauty were your eyes
That drowned me in the currents of your gaze
Shone as the sun in summer’s brightest skies
And burned away my heart’s resilient haze
Your eyes, though bright, are filled with twilight’s wonder
As night descends and fireflies alight
They reach to me and tear my heart asunder
Releasing my desire into flight
Though dark, your eyes recall the break of morning
Upon horizons fraught with tempest’s gale
I will not heed the sailors’ stormy warning
But launch upon these waters to prevail
In dreams I sail beneath the skies
Reflected in your perfect eyes


[II]

The second proof of beauty is your smile
Whose crescent’s light usurps the waxing moon
I bathe within this silver glow the while
I listen to your laughter sing its tune
Though seldom seen, a gift of rare delight
That casts away my darkness and regret
Within my dreams you shine throughout the night
In dreams your smile I never may forget
On waking when the light of day surrounds
Me drawn up tight against the morning chill
A recollected dream recalls the sounds
Of your sweet smiling laughter singing still
When I am left without your smile
I face, by far, my greatest trial


[III]

True beauty lies not in the mortal form
But is expressed in kindness and in grace
Intangible, your temperament is warm
Surpassing the construction of your face
I see the beauty you have deep within
Though not with tired eyes that know no rest
But with a heart that ever seeks to win
The comfort of your warm and loving breast
Where gentleness and kindness are your guide
Your beauty shines, as does the sun of May
Exposing all that darkness seeks to hide
And holding every lover to your sway
With kindness you have captured me
You hold me with your constancy


[IV]

Your intellect surpasses blinded faith
Though many try to bring the curtain down
Upon the truth which passes like a wraith
Within their hallowed halls of high renown
You see beyond the censer’s purple smoke
Beyond the fabled tales of long ago
Discernment is the fire that you stoke
To hold a flaming brand with which to know
What deafened men can only wish to see
What fluttered past the hearing of the blind
Your wit is beauty’s proof enough to me
For loveliness is also of the mind
Your beauty understands the art
To solve the puzzle of my heart


[V]

Your beauty is reflected in your art
In images of grace and flowing line
Expressing all the passions of your heart
A temple holding talent as a shrine
To visions of your dreams and deep desire
Erected in this jaded golden age
That ignorance could never set afire
Nor lies erase the icons from the page
That waits for gentle strokes of your sweet pen
My canvas craves your brush’s fine caress
Which captivates the lonely hearts of men
Whose love for you they surely must confess
Your art evokes the mysteries
Of longing possibilities



Sing while you may
  -The Prophet Qa'sepel

Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen
   -The Prophet Qa'sepel

[This message has been edited by Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith (edited 10-01-2001).]

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2001-10-01 03:34 AM


Ah yes a fantastic expression of the characteristics of beauty...James
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-10-01 05:53 AM


I don't believe I had the pleasure of reading this the first time around Ian ... but I am sincerely pleased to have read it now. What a wonderfully romantic piece ... your phrasing and rhyme is superb. This is very beautifully written, much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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