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Moon Fathoms |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Moon Fathom The moon is lit in fathoms deep reflected rippled around the corner where the first star lays her arms into the blossom of froth where churning is cloistered She prisms spirals down into silver eyes and grace dances through her streets all a glow with sand tinted steep slide her cold fire reaps the quiet crackle of somnolence She is not quite whole or perfect in the sphere of compass measure for she shifts a piece into the wait of morrow but she is now and beautiful [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 09-30-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moon is lit in fathoms deep reflected rippled around the corner where the first star lays her arms into the blossom of froth where churning is cloistered She prisms spirals down into silver eyes and grace dances through her streets all a glow with sand tinted steep slide her cold fire reaps the quiet crackle of somnolence ===================================== I went for a drive earlier tonite to get away from the city lights so I could see the moon and stars better... and I said to myself...this is a martie moon and now here you are....shining divinely and how cool you included that its not quite whole yet... beautiful poem Martie sweet poetess of the moon  We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahhh, Martie, gentle one, it is not perfect, for nothing ever is, but your poems come so very very close...very gentle smile |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh boy! Are we looking at the same moon? Martie, I wish I could see just one thing, one thing, through your eyes for one minute. Your imagery is untouchable, and this was the nicest poem about the moon I have ever read...."around the corner where the first star lays her arms into the blossom of froth where churning is cloistered"...oh my, now that was just the most beautiful wording I have read since ~ your last poem ~  ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
What beautiful imagery you show here. Lovely piece of writing If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
This is wonderful, Martie, consider me a moonie, you bring the moon to life so beautifully Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Lovely ... from sliver to fully fathomed it always glows through your thoughts~ You, of course, knew ...  Love you~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your phrasing is vivid and the imagery moved me, Martie, I enjoyed reading this this morning, thank you so much. Kathleen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: as every woman reads this, she realizes, with gratitude, it is okay and all right, to continue in growing... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully expressed, as always, Martie! Lovely! |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Martie, very expressive poem. Much enjoyed. I love the moon too. Will share it soon. warm smiles, ~Marie~ |
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