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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
 Confined to the blue encasing of the morning moon-- Which led me the whole way-- You made use of the embedded white above, Fine-tuning each corner of exposed daylight. Floating high over my vision’s range But so parallel to my soul, You entered the level at which my heart was beating And brought rhythm to my secret disorder. Reaching out to the assistance of which I was unaware, My spirit soared beyond the boundaries I’d made Inside the years of self-restraining isolation. Streaming mists of silence rolled into these lungs As I breathed every ounce of your air, Taking in what I did not know was your essence, And urging every part of me to fuse with the fragrance. Divine hands of silk stroked my face, Drawing tears from depths not yet stirred, Even in love’s distantly previous visit. Watching the clouds align to illustrate The dancing in my thoughts, The realization of your presence surrounded me-- The comprehension of you beside me Reduced me to kneeling on the grass, For my powerlessness to the immensity of the encounter. Taking my hands from my face, You whispered that only the emptiest pieces of life Are seen through defending fingers. For so long, I could not see why This sweater just wasn't warm enough, Even in mid-August. It wasn't until you proved how complete it could be If I would just stop hiding my eyes That I learned the actuality of your nearness. -kh 09/07/01 tried to write a letter |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
snowpants - your writing is beautiful, as the picture. I would walk those stairs... BC |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
You have written some very beautiful lines..my favorite.."You entered the level at which my heart was beating" A very beautiful poem and I love the pic... reminds me of something I have envisioned before. Thanks for your comment on my poem, I am honored that you liked it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Snowpants, Great palette enjoyed the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Snowpants...this is so incredibly beautiful! I cannot pluck one section or line which is my favourite...it is all so breathtaking, as is the picture. Like a stairway to Heaven. Thank you for sharing this one. ~Nancy~
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy it was really tough to pull out some lines I loved over others, but these stuck out at me, "As I breathed every ounce of your air, Taking in what I did not know was your essence, And urging every part of me to fuse with the fragrance." For when there is fusion, brother there is love! This was fantastic writing. ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
What a truly beautiful piece of writing here. Amazing You whispered that only the emptiest pieces of life Are seen through defending fingers There's a lesson there. One day I'll learn it If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Confined to the blue encasing of the morning moon-- Which led me the whole way-- You made use of the embedded white above, Fine-tuning each corner of exposed daylight. Floating high over my vision’s range But so parallel to my soul, You entered the level at which my heart was beating And brought rhythm to my secret disorder. =========================================== Streaming mists of silence rolled into these lungs As I breathed every ounce of your air, Taking in what I did not know was your essence, And urging every part of me to fuse with the fragrance. ====================================== The realization of your presence surrounded me-- The comprehension of you beside me Reduced me to kneeling on the grass, For my powerlessness to the immensity of the encounter. Taking my hands from my face, You whispered that only the emptiest pieces of life Are seen through defending fingers. ========================================== well its about time ya got yer frostbutt in here and posted a poem for me to read hehe obnoxious?? MOI???? lol this is one very cool poem girlie and ya know I was relating to that essence and fragrance part... as always your vision and view of imagery impresses as does your vocabulary... but it is the emotions that soar across this ones sky and touch down with devotion. like I said very cool...and groovy too   (why if I didnt know better..I would think you typed this with....q *ack--nevermind*)hehehehehe We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ 'The comprehension of you beside me Reduced me to kneeling on the grass, For my powerlessness to the immensity of the encounter. Taking my hands from my face, You whispered that only the emptiest pieces of life Are seen through defending fingers.' This is such a powerful statement~ Seems that one who tends your heart is a wise one~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
OUTSTANDING!!!!!!!!!!!!! Kathleen |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Whoa! I think you just woke somebody up. Been trying to wrap my mind around a few things lately and this poem gives me a different perspective. Maybe there's something I've been missing... Great write, snowpants. Marvelous, in fact. Thank you. Trev. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
snowpants Such a beautifully romantic picture you have painted here from your palette of fine words. Take care.......Sue Suetang |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is wonderful, in all ways. Sandra |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Suberb work, sp. You have outdone yourself, my friend!!  All writing comes |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Snowpants! Wonderful visuals ... you've captured such a tender and inspirational mood, very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
snowpants, a fine poem, words expressed by a fine poet. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Bill: thanks so much...glad you liked it! Songbird: thank you...I appreciate your kind reply... Sy: well, thank you...happy that you enjoyed! Nancy: thank you so much for the reply...I am glad you liked it so much! Mysteria: thank you, I appreciate the kind comments! glad you liked! Tracey: yep, I'm with ya on that one...but thank you for your reply! glad you enjoyed it! J: well, I am glad you could relate...I'd be a bit frightened if you couldn't...well, not frightened...just wondering just what it is my Q, um, PEN is writing these days...hehe...thanks, J...glad you liked it... Marge: yes, indeed, my friend...thank you so much! Kathleen: thanks! Trev: well, that means a lot to me...I'm glad you could get something out of this! thanks so much! Sue: thanks, my friend...I appreciate your kind words! Sandra: thanks so much! LW: well, thanks! I'm glad you liked it! Kit: then I have accomplished something I have tried to do, haven't I? thanks so much! Daniel: thank you my friend...I do appreciate your reply... sp  tried to write a letter |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Is it any wonder that I love you so much. You do so have a way to capturing a soul and then really spoiling him don't you? I am not complaining mind you. LOL Your poetry has grown so much since you came to Passions and I am so glad that I get to be so close at hand to watch and enjoy your growth. The cadence, format, and spellbinding grasp your words hold are now and will forever be cherished as much as you yourself are. Lovely my dear. Hugs and kisses. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Thank you, baby...you are a sweetie...I am glad you liked this...  ...I'm glad you got to drop by and see it...talk to ya later! k  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
snowpants- This is so beautifully penned...and for such a deserving person too. Not only is he wise...but a wonderful inspiration as well.. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (edited 10-23-2001).] |
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