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Duncan
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0 posted 2001-09-29 01:40 AM




After so many years
seesawing
too high, too low
half-hearted efforts
toward any commitment
to rest

I give you, now
the best of me

and I already see
it’s not going to be
enough

Why does that surprise me?


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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2001-09-29 02:41 AM


Perhaps the timing just isn't right, or maybe she just doesn't see the whole picture of you. It hurts, either way.  
anonymousfemale
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2 posted 2001-09-29 04:29 AM


Maybe she isn't ready to see all of you yet or maybe, like midnitesun said, the timing is off.

Stay strong and thanks for the read.  

~AF~

"Reality is only a feeble rendering of the energy brought forth by the imagination"

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2001-09-29 05:27 AM


I think it's something to do with we're peanut butter and they want jelly...James
Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2001-09-29 06:07 AM


She's just plain stupid, not seeing what you offer, the whole of you.

Maybe she just takes you for granted, maybe you shoudn't give the whole of you for a while, so than maybe she realizes what she's throwing away.

Great poem

Titia

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dgvarner
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5 posted 2001-09-29 08:03 AM


"next time i'll save a little love for myself.."  -tracy chapman

  perhaps you give too much...i'm guilty of that meself.....

but those of us who give all...maybe one day we'll be rewarded with love we could only have dreamed of....  

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"all you need is someone you can hold..dont be sad, youre not alone..i will be here for you..."  mwsmith

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
6 posted 2001-09-29 08:37 AM


so incredibly beautiful....

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
7 posted 2001-09-29 11:30 AM


This is very good. I know how you feel. I have done the same thing. Thank you for sharing this.
walker
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8 posted 2001-09-29 06:43 PM


If we give too much is bad , if we give too little is also bad. Love is hard and some people are never satisfied. But to be loved no matter what, that's how I want to be loved. Great poem.
Lone Wolf
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9 posted 2001-09-29 07:17 PM


I think it surprises you because we all want to see things as we hope they were  and not as they actually are.  It isn't easy, but somehow you have to find a balance in giving.  It has to be mutual or it can't work.  Intriguing thoughts, Duncan.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding
10 posted 2001-09-30 01:02 AM


Sad write here. I'd say maybe it's time to let go, but I know all too well that that is sometimes easier said than done.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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