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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-09-28 06:08 PM


He writes of her as if he knows her
moon, and songs of love she sings
He speaks as though he's danced below
her arms the comfort of moonbeams
and all this rhyme of twinkly things
her eyes a million lights in sky
as I keep pace of haunting's trace
blowing smoke-rings as he dreams--
for all my words that went unheard
each dawn another tear to cry...
I cannot find capacity,
I can never speak
That word I've heard through tears of burn--
I cannot tell this man "goodbye."

So it is true I make my choice
and where I stand intend to dwell,
No one understands me now...
My preference to stay in Hell.
He says we cannot understand,
but I think that I do
in bondage to decaying past
I closed my eyes to present truth.


(repost from somewhere, I forget where...   ??)


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1 posted 2001-09-28 07:09 PM


this is an amazing write Serenity.  
Logan
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2 posted 2001-09-28 07:31 PM


Ahh, so good you always were and are..very gentle smile
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3 posted 2001-09-28 08:13 PM


Wow, this is wonderful, I do understand the feeling, also. Great write, as always.
Sandra

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4 posted 2001-09-28 08:22 PM


He writes of her as if he knows her
moon, and songs of love she sings
He speaks as though he's danced below
her arms the comfort of moonbeams
and all this rhyme of twinkly things
her eyes a million lights in sky
as I keep pace of haunting's trace
blowing smoke-rings as he dreams--
for all my words that went unheard
each dawn another tear to cry...
======================================
So it is true I make my choice
and where I stand intend to dwell,
No one understands me now...
My preference to stay in Hell.
=======================================


who cares where its a repost from...
I could read this one till I go blind :cool:
awesome..AWESOME write me twin...better be careful...
someone might think ya is a moth    

Alan
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5 posted 2001-09-28 09:14 PM


Serenity..I know where you are coming from. Great read little lady....
alan

SmittenKitten
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6 posted 2001-09-29 12:26 PM



Serenity~ I read this a couple times and each time I came away with something new.

This is some charged writing!  
Hugs to you,
~Krista  

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Irish Rose
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7 posted 2001-09-30 11:19 AM


this is electric!

Kathleen
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8 posted 2001-09-30 11:54 AM


I know this feeling all too well.  Great work, Karen.  A very pleasant Sunday to you.

Michael

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There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2001-10-01 10:12 AM


I'm only sorry that so many of you could relate on a personal level.  

But thank you all for reading, and gentle smiles to Logan..GOOD? MOI?   But thanks for your confidence in me!  

The Lady of Shallot
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10 posted 2001-10-04 04:47 PM


in bondage to decaying past
I closed my eyes to present truth"

I relate.....all too well.

rwood
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11 posted 2001-10-04 09:21 PM


I was there once. You describe it so deeply and so well that I visited briefly again. You have so much to offer. I appreciate you sharing still. Talent is only one aspect.

Sincerely,
Regina

Tracey
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12 posted 2001-10-04 10:21 PM


Fantastic write here. I think we've all been there, watching someone we like paying attention to another. And you just want to scream HEY, WHAT ABOUT ME!!!

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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13 posted 2001-10-04 11:05 PM


That's one of the beauties of your writing, serene one....so many people can relate to the emotions you describe. That's called talent...and a lotta lousy luck!  
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