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Finally, Something We Agree Upon |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Through a lens with one eye shut I look too deeply into you... logging inconsistancies interest proves complicity threads in weave, intricately-- perhaps I'm searching you for me. We share the pain. We trade the blame. We both agree that I'm not there. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"with one eye shut I look too deeply into you..." this is AWESOME! I love love love that part!  |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Serenity~ Those are some difficult thoughts to ponder...expressed with the ease and beauty typical of you though "perhaps I'm searching you for me" ...that's a little nugget for me to think about! Hugs, ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
We share the pain. We trade the blame. We both agree that I'm not there. I love this poem. And I relate more than I wish to admit. Great write. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"perhaps I'm searching you for me." Love this line, Gorgeous. Maree |
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Sinister Handed Member
since 2001-08-05
Posts 58 |
Very nicely written! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well written and these were rock-hard lines: We share the pain. We trade the blame. We both agree that I'm not there. Many could identify and wonder if in fact "they" are not there either, and are looking for themselves in the "you". Excellent write about being lost souls. ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"We both agree that I'm not there." this is so grippingly painful...it tears at me...helen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
perhaps I'm searching you for me. We share the pain. We trade the blame. We both agree that I'm not there. =========================================== MIRROR MIRROR next time youre peeking in my windows... come in and have tea with me... we'll listen to chick songs ... watch pretty boys sing on the videos(Steven) ... polish the mirrors... get in the car and make Thelma and Louise look like Lucy and Ethel   me |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It is never one sided when it comes to the pain or the blame..and I think we all search in others for ourselves... but dear friend... you are here... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- You've expressed it well, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow! Just wow! Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
If you're looking into the mirror of your soul, the trouble with mirrors is they give you a reverse image of what you really are. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 10-02-2001).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
O Serene One, This is splendid writing... Regards, Sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know this too well, but never could have said it near this way |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Unfortunately, like almost everyone before me, I can see myself in every line. Hmm... Really makes one think, doesn't it? Loved it! The brave may die...but the cautious never live... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am so pleased to be writing again and delighted to know that i am being read---much thanks... and i have to apologize again on slow replies---sigh,,,(you were right ron---  ---the finger is fractured and it splintered so now my whole damned hand is wrapped---puts a crimp in my already bad typing!)thanks and open arm hugs to all! be back replying soon--but know that i am still reading... love you all. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-02-2001).] |
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