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Alan
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0 posted 2001-09-26 08:53 PM


Private H***

Fighting for survival just to exist
Existing just to be knocked down and walked upon
Making a living is just someone’s idea of an evil prank
You better believe it’s just so they can give your chain a yank
Nothing is ever truly in black and white
Except a moon lit night
Prophets spouting certain doom
Filling someone’s mind with utter garbage
Until it is tattooed on the brain
People wasting away
As they wish their lives away
People watching her on tv
Thinking she’s got it made
Wishing that they had her private life
Little knowing she wants to take her own life
Feeling used and abused thinking she doesn’t have a life
No longer able to get high on life
Always being drug down
By some stupid clown
While she is just fighting for survival
To continue to exist
In her own private little h***



© Copyright 2001 Alan - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2001-09-26 09:03 PM


Well Alan...You sure got my mind whirling with this write.  Left me sitting here deep in thought...I enjoy that. Good one!
~Nancy~


~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~
  

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2 posted 2001-09-26 09:33 PM


who says the grass is greener?! I'll take my life any day, at least I know how to cope in it   Alan, this is intense..........great write!  

"when I catch my breath, it's you I breathe" ~Michelle Branch~

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Tracey
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3 posted 2001-09-26 09:39 PM


This is deep, raw and emotional. Quite the gritty expression of feeling. Very interesting write here.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Alan
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4 posted 2001-09-26 10:14 PM


Nancy...I am glad I could make you think.

Sea...Sometimes I think about changing mine..but then I look at what I have..

Tracey...thank you..I wrote this little thing in answer to a challenge...it got deep in a hurry on me.

rwood
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5 posted 2001-09-29 08:57 AM


Very well spilt out in emotion. I like the way this speaks in rawness. True so true. Envy is so destructive. There is nothing positive in setting up house on someone's heart or brain. Thank you for sharing.

Sincerely,
Regina

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