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obverse obscenity
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obverse obscenity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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with systematic precision the maddening pendulum of days ticking by I watch his face stretch into the perverse grin of a jester's glee --obverse obscenity-- feeding on my misery each tear nectar to his tongue each weary sigh his feed of lung my soul, my life, twisted in self defense now in fetal retreat all my effort, wasted and spent I wonder what is this victory-- why does he have this need to desecrate that which he crowns queen and as I lay in wait crumpled in the corner to reclaim the throne that by his own proclamation is mine by rights divine-- exiled, I wait for the game to begin again. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I hope "he" is the fickle winds of fate and not an individual who would treat you thus. In any case a provoking write. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Agreeing with RS above. This is extremely poignant writing. I do hope you know that hugs are coming your way!! HUGS!!! On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, To say the least certainly a provoking piece. But all the earth has its night and than comes the shining bright. |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
why does he have this need to desecrate that which he crowns queen and as I lay in wait crumpled in the corner to reclaim the throne that by his own proclamation is mine by rights divine-- exiled, I wait for the game to begin again. This made me "scream" inside Serenity. I have to agree with Richard on this one, it speaks loudly of abuse to me, and if that is not the subject, can you enlighten me? Extremely well written on a subject known only to well by so many if I am reading this right. ~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Interesting write.... if one was to analyze the motivation behind and the emotions contained within... one would wonder.... nicely done as always.... In twisted wring of smile you looked at me the while I lay there in misery With calloused grab of hand you forced me then to stand and left then to fall stronger you still say it makes me every day but tears leave scars touch not the tender lest your hand be gentle |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
Guys like this need to be put in our round up pens here in Texas when we are making little boy calves where they can't grow up to be bulls. snip snip Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I want to thank you all for reading and for the concerned e mails---and I assure you, I am not being physically abused. Just the process of grief working itself out around here, and it does occur to me, that there are at least 13,000 other families who share my same sense of loss and resulting rage... Thank you again. Love to you all, and Ron? Loved the poem---double thanks to you, with hugs. I'll be around more when my poetry is not quite so annoying to some.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
indeed there are more. . . sad to say. . . you've given them a voice. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
What a soul full of emotion you have poured out here. Such a great write, I can feel it through to my pores. So well done If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
(quote) "I'll be around more when my poetry is not quite so annoying to some." ============================== Well..I dont know who the "some" is... but what I do KNOW is... you CAN BE HERE whenever YOU WANT.... and if you stay away too long ... I'll have to walk there ... YES(say it with me) ... on me lips... ON GLASS ... to make ya post me some rhymes!!!! I was already in Archives stalking ya the other nite  |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh Serenity, this may not be about your abuse, but this is EXACTLY what it was like for me. I couldn't breathe good reading this.....what painful memories flood with this. wow......this is an excellent write, and I'm so glad you are ok |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
annoying??? some things are hard to read... some are hard to write .......but they still ARE...please do not let others stop you from writing your heart...that's why we are here...to write our hearts...i am thinking of you...helen |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Serenity~ What a haunting write...I hope this helped you to purge your demons. I'm sending you hugs filled with warmth and tenderness anyway though! Never hold back your writing because you think we won't enjoy....let us surprise you Take care of you. Lots of hugs  ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too [This message has been edited by SmittenKitten (edited 09-28-2001).] |
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