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The Tome of Time |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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"The dates on our tombstones lack any meanin' the only thing that matters is the dash in between 'em" -Old Appalachian Rhyme I've tried leaving it in the confessional, at four or five shrink's offices, in the cedar chests at the foot of several unsuspecting Lovers beds. Hell, I've even attempted being clever "losing" it in the care of strangers on the bus. But it's swelling presence is constant. The Book of the Past, whose pages are written with each uplifted heel, each exhaled breath, every dried tear and spent orgasm. I've tried to erase it's darker pages, only smudging their lessons dooming potential recurrence. Being unable to escape it I reflect on how it will be edited in the end. What will be made of the continued reappearance of chapters titled Blame and Guilt? Or the abrupt and cliff hangered curtailment mid sentence, even mid word treatise Love and Success? What will be made of the one called Happiness which contains but one word; Almost? Not even an essay dedicated to Contentment, but volumes captioned Anger, Wrath. While Faith and Charity make for skimpy reads and Hope diaphanous. It seems the Seven Deadly Sins have representation but Meek not a squeak. It's as hardbound as the rock of Gibraltar and has a chain attached to my present and mineral rights on the future. I believe I know the ending. It becomes our headstone and outweighs our coffin. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done as usual... great read and good depth... bravo! |
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illusion Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 296 |
Twice in one day your poems have left me speechless - your depth is amazing, your words are wrenching. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It is easy to see why you take on the mantle of chivalry.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But it's swelling presence is constant. The Book of the Past, whose pages are written with each uplifted heel, each exhaled breath, every dried tear and spent orgasm. Being unable to escape it I reflect on how it will be edited in the end. What will be made of the continued reappearance of chapters titled Blame and Guilt? ================================== What will be made of the one called Happiness which contains but one word; Almost? Not even an essay dedicated to Contentment, but volumes captioned Anger, Wrath. ===================================== It seems the Seven Deadly Sins have representation but Meek not a squeak. It's as hardbound as the rock of Gibraltar and has a chain attached to my present ============================ I believe I know the ending. It becomes our headstone and outweighs our coffin. ==================================== Several lines into this... as I realized where you were taking it .... I started smiling and shaking my head at the sheer poetic cleverness of it ... this is a very cool write Richard... you took the extended metaphor and theme and made it your own.... as for the intentions of the emotions I relate to far too many of your chapters... but I guess I am hoping for a rewrite or a sequel of second chances... I know we all deserve a happy ending ... and remember..not all those seven sins are yours...some things we atone for -- are passed on to us by others... as for those chains... those wise men "we" are always quoting... they keep saying... "only we can set ourselves free" Once again your words effect me and reflect me... must mean your a poet, huh? *L*  excellent writing R ... truely. jm Well tomorrow holds only mystery And who's to say what might be But in you I found a love so strong The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 09-25-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is amazing, I can't begin to say which parts I like, the whole thing is so emotionally touched. The book of the past, heavy as can be.. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing writing! This grabbed my attention from the beginning and held it through to the end. I truly enjoy your incredible writing skills. Nancy. ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Absolutely brilliant. I could pick out my favorite verses, but there are SO many. Stupendous. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well you really did it with this fantastic, metaphorically brilliant piece of writing; you are now indelible in my mind as a Poet Lauriat. However, I would not mind editing a few of those chapters, as a friend, I make a great proof reader and could write in a little more happiness  Wow Richard, really, this was absolutely fantastic writing, and held me from beginning to end. The only sad part is it speaks your heart.~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
We often lament the past tis true but here are some wise words just for you everything happens for it's own reason everything changes from season to season You've really touched a chord in me with this one sir. We are blessed to have you here among us (but get out of that gulag! it sounds like something Hungarian with macaroni and tomatoes!) |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Wow! No way will I ever believe your chapters are anything less than brilliant. Whether you speak of a skid mark of carefree self indulgence or a Lock Down of unmarked soul searching....you do it with heart...and with the expertise of a tightrope acrobat. You fall down good and you get up even better. You're not ready Richard for any tombstone...and your words never will be. Sincerely, Regina |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
And you, my friend, are leaving a pretty long dash _________ in our hearts. Another awesome write from an awesome writer. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Richard, your growth is amazing and this piece is the flagship of your library, and now mine. Have I ever mentioned you Texans write good? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
there's a lot of meat in this one, it's very GOOD. I have this same philosphy now....I delete the words that I don't need and concentrate on the ones that are truth. Kathleen |
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