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illusion
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since 2001-06-19
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0 posted 2001-09-24 05:11 PM


Dreams besmirched,
Desperate search
Through festive church -
Wretched venue!

How was I
To say goodbye
When my heart cried
To continue?

Friends all said
You should be dead -
The lies you fed,
So destructive.

Left alone
I must go on,
The love I've sown
Unproductive.

© Copyright 2001 illusion - All Rights Reserved
RSWells
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1 posted 2001-09-24 05:35 PM


A sad, indeed a lonely poignant read.
Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2001-09-25 06:34 AM


Oh, this is so sad Illusion. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme in this piece, and the clarity of emotions, well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

illusion
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since 2001-06-19
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3 posted 2001-09-25 05:11 PM


RSWells and Kit,

I admire your work so very much and appreciate both of you reading my attempt to make sense of what will never make sense. I sincerely thank you.

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