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Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2001-09-22 03:08 PM



Within your Maze
~~~


Tears
transform
a tranquill room
expose
a sleepless night
Stumble
over speechless sounds
to liquify
your sight
My eyes could shut
and call this dream
slip back
through slumber's door
Though captured whys
deflate serene
deplete
arouse
deplore
~
I search
within your eyes
a light
mear spark
disperse of haze
My touch caressed
your salted cheek
my thoughts
within your maze
A sudden hug
you cling to me
my heart surrounds you tight
You turn away
but snuggle close
You smile
and say
Goodnight ...
~~~

© Copyright 2001 Rex Allen McCoy - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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1 posted 2001-09-22 03:37 PM


Oh my Rex ... so many beautiful phrases within this delightful and romantic piece. The cadence and rhyme is superb my friend ... what a lovely and flowing verse. Very much enjoyed!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2001-09-22 03:46 PM



This tripped gently through silent reading, then in a whisper I said each word...and it was just as lovely in quiet reverence as it is in thought...

well done, Sir...

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Canada eh.
3 posted 2001-09-22 03:54 PM


Reads as soft and gentle as a lover's caress. Very well done Rex.
~smiles~ Nancy.

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2001-09-22 03:55 PM


Now you two ladies have gotten my head in a spin ... I think I like your replies better than I do my poem

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
5 posted 2001-09-22 03:57 PM


Lets make that three ladies ... you snuck in Nancy, while I wasn't looking

Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2001-09-22 04:34 PM


"My eyes could shut
and call this dream
slip back
through slumber's door"

REx, this is an absolutely lovely poem, soft in phrase and sentiment.
Superb writing
Liz

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with you
7 posted 2001-09-22 05:17 PM


I like this very much Rex   it feels comforting  
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8 posted 2001-09-22 07:07 PM


Rex~

'My eyes could shut
and call this dream
slip back
through slumber's door'


*sighhhhhhhs*
Lovely thoughts~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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9 posted 2001-09-22 07:43 PM


Very calm and loving. I liked this much.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

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10 posted 2001-09-23 10:26 AM


Very beautiful, Rex.
Sandra

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