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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2001-09-22 06:09 AM


Morning Love Song

Kiss me softly darling Jasmine
oh my heart begins to stir
when your searching lips deliver
sweet delight that makes me quiver
from the warmth of your lips pursed.
Kiss me deeply darling Jasmine
when the light returns to earth.

Chorus:
There's is moonlight in the evening
there are stars that glow above
but there is nothing like the feeling
I get with you in morning love.

Take my hand and all my wishes
upon your breast when morning comes.
Take me where my dreams won't perish
across the hills of love I cherish
and count my heart-beats one by one.
Drink my passion darling Jasmine
while our romance greets the sun.

Rep Chorus:

Tag:
Just you and I darling Jasmine
You and I when the morning comes
There can be no greater pleasure    
Than you and I and morning love.
you and I and morning love...........fade
  

The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up
spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to
re-language historie

© Copyright 2001 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Alan
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499
right next door
1 posted 2001-09-22 06:39 AM


ethome....I like this..it is good...
alan

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2001-09-22 06:41 AM


ethome,
still writing magic I see, stunning! but love so often is.
Kethry

Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life.  Patty Hansen.



ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2001-09-22 06:54 AM


Thanks Alan and Kethry for taking the time to read and reply.....much appreciated!  Have a nice day!!     ethome
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-09-22 09:41 AM


There's is moonlight in the evening
there are stars that glow above
but there is nothing like the feeling
I get with you in morning love.

Take my hand and all my wishes
upon your breast when morning comes.
Take me where my dreams won't perish
across the hills of love I cherish
and count my heart-beats one by one.
Drink my passion darling Jasmine
while our romance greets the sun.
============================

E-babes..your rhymes rival the sun's shine this morn ... this is romantic and sensually soft..a lovely way to start the day.
As is finding your name here sweet poet pal

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2001-09-22 10:24 AM


Thank you so much Janet!  As always I truly appreciate your comments!
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
6 posted 2001-09-22 10:37 AM


Ethome--and this is just how it should be in the morning..tender is written in this  song....just beautiful!  Its good to see you ethome!
Kit McCallum
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7 posted 2001-09-22 01:45 PM


Beautifully tender and romantic Eric ... this flows so tenderly, very much enjoyed these romantic sentiments!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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8 posted 2001-09-22 02:12 PM


ETHome~
You surely sing the morning song so gently~
This is a lovely piece~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Domzi
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since 2001-09-08
Posts 288
New York (BK)
9 posted 2001-09-22 02:26 PM


Lovely...the only word that's coming through my lips.
Sunshine
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10 posted 2001-09-22 04:03 PM



So you tke it upon yourself to tweak...and end up with a piece that sings a little brighter...

'tis wonderful!

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