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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2001-09-22 12:25 PM


Into the twilight
you whispered to my heart
letting me know
through space and time
we are not apart

~*~

your soft touch came
light upon the breeze
I swear I heard your laughter
in the rustle of leaves

~*~

feeling Fall
falling free
with your love
surrounding me

~*~

~SEA~

© Copyright 2001 S.E. A - All Rights Reserved
Honeybee
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1 posted 2001-09-22 12:26 PM



Wonderfully romantic  

I knew that you could do it perfectly, girl!  

I need to try this!

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

SEA
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2 posted 2001-09-22 12:29 PM


thank you Melissa!! I'll be looking for yours  
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3 posted 2001-09-22 12:42 PM


As if we had need to worry...  

You teased and
then pleased with
these.

All very nice, but this took one more step forward than the rest with me...

"feeling Fall
falling free
with your love
surrounding me"

Alan
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4 posted 2001-09-22 12:44 PM


This is beautiful SEA...great romance here...
alan

SEA
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5 posted 2001-09-22 12:45 PM


thank you  
I hope I did them right
I like these  
I love Fall
so that one was very me....
it's offically Fall on 9-22-01 @4:05 pm  

Alan
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6 posted 2001-09-22 01:01 AM


looks close enough to perfect for me...
Kethry
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7 posted 2001-09-22 07:36 AM


SEA,
I don't know what the under 20 is about, but this was neatly done.
Keth.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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8 posted 2001-09-22 12:34 PM


Fall has always been my favorite time of the year.  There's something quite magical about it to me.  This is pretty, Susan. Nice work, sweet friend   (((hugs))))

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.  

Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2001-09-22 12:47 PM


"feeling Fall
falling free
with your love
surrounding me"

This is so delicate and tender ... just lovely Susan!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

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10 posted 2001-09-22 01:07 PM


Into the twilight
you whispered to my heart
letting me know
through space and time
we are not apart
=======================

softly spoken succinct perfection  

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

Enchantress
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11 posted 2001-09-22 01:51 PM


Oh SEA...you do these so well!!  Enjoyed!

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~

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12 posted 2001-09-28 03:30 AM


looks like we all have our favourites...i liked the second one best..

i swear i heard your laughter
in the rustle of leaves

SmartChick
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13 posted 2001-09-28 10:11 AM


I like this one. Very good.
Logan
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14 posted 2001-09-28 07:41 PM


Geez, SEA, under twenty or over one hundred, your words flow like touching fine silk.you amaze me continuously on your skills..very gentle smile
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15 posted 2001-09-28 08:11 PM


Excellent "try", you do them all well.
Sandra

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16 posted 2001-09-29 04:02 AM


Short and sweet and to the point. Love them, Sea.

Dee

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17 posted 2001-09-29 07:46 AM


SEA,

     Despite that I am once again out of the loop and have no idea what you were suppose to do (20 or less?).. its a wonderful poem. Romantic.. sweet... you make incredable poetry look so easy  

TaraB

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