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spiked
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Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2001-09-21 09:52 PM



I lie awake at night and hear
The rhythm of your breath
What makes you hold your thoughts inside?
Still showing your duress
Are scars cast deep enough to cause
Such lingering of pain
Looking for words to comfort you
Is driving me insane
Is there a way to reach your heart?
And bring it back to life
Remove from it the darkened edge
And add to it some spice
A twinkle in those lovely eyes
A sign to let me know
That the effort I am giving
Eventually will show
Sometimes it makes me wonder
Is it you or is it me?
Open up and let me in
Together we can see
If what lies ahead gets bumpy
We can weather through the storm
But without the words being spoken
There’s cause for such alarm
I’ll hold my hands together
In place shaped as a cup
In it place your heart
And trust I won’t corrupt
But treat it oh so gently
Connecting yours with mine
The feelings I am having
Is in the grand design.


[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 09-22-2001).]

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Topheth
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1 posted 2001-09-21 10:20 PM


Lovely flow and verse.  A smile to my face.
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2 posted 2001-09-22 04:02 AM


Spiked~

'A twinkle in those lovely eyes
A sign to let me know
That the effort I am giving
Eventually will show'


Man ... this is tenderly done~
Hope she listens~
~*Marge*~

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serenity blaze
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3 posted 2001-09-22 05:07 AM


who can sleep?  
Rick
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since 2001-06-21
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4 posted 2001-09-22 08:20 AM


May the love you wish to share, come calling you today.
May the emptiness inside with love just go away.
May the gentle touch you give and tenderness you show
Give you only joy in life and more love than you know.

Spiked, well written, much enjoyed, gave me some sad images. Soothing to the soul to share with others.

Good luck

Sincerely
Rick

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