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Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2001-09-20 01:55 PM

As one on hypothetical deathbed
contemplating
the allocation of last moments
I was taken aback
by my desire
to spend each one with you.

Now, upon grateful revival
I only hope
to live up to
the clarity of last moments.

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2001-09-20 02:22 PM

A wonderful little love poem. Guess we're all having those last minute thoughts this week. Nice poem!

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

2 posted 2001-09-20 02:26 PM

enjoy

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-09-20 02:28 PM

oh Duncan,

this is so loving
I really like this

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2001-09-20 02:56 PM

Duncan...very well penned. How very true. We all probably thought those same things...now to carry them through.

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

5 posted 2001-09-20 04:54 PM

Sincere feeling of love unwrapped.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

6 posted 2001-09-28 12:29 PM

a lot of love in this puppy...

i like

hugs, g

~dgvarner/fallen rain~

"all you need is someone you can hold..dont be sad, youre not alone..i will be here for you..." mwsmith

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-06-03

Posts 661
Tennessee

7 posted 2001-09-28 12:32 PM

This is beautiful..

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-09-28 02:05 PM

I was taken aback
by my desire
to spend each one with you.

Now, upon grateful revival
I only hope
to live up to
the clarity of last moments.

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of the several of yours I have read now...
succinctity and impact are your poetic signature and strength...
Brievity is not easy to do and do well.
Im far too long winded

very cool poem Duncan
jm

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2001-09-28 03:18 PM

Like the thoughts...James

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

10 posted 2001-09-28 04:28 PM

I wonder if it's the clarity of last moments or the imaginations of disaster. I remember a movie one time where a plane was destined to crash and everyone aboard thought of things they wish they had done and prayed to God that if He gave them a second change, they would change. Well, the plane didn't crashed, all were saved and who changed? Yep, you're right. So your plea is so accurate...to be able to hold on to the clarity...

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

11 posted 2001-09-28 06:35 PM

I just love this piece.
So much said with great impact.

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

12 posted 2001-09-28 08:24 PM

Like this very much. Good thoughts.
Sandra

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2001-09-28 09:25 PM

So much said
so few words
such clarity

I like the minimalist approach.

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