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Two Lovers

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The Rusty Knight
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0 posted 09-20-2001 11:22 AM       View Profile for The Rusty Knight   Email The Rusty Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit The Rusty Knight's Home Page   View IP for The Rusty Knight


Two lovers walk in twilight
Making footprints in the warm white sand
Seeking a quiet secluded place
To sit in love’s embrace

The air was still, not a rustling leaf
As they found a spot under a tall palm tree
The sea was like a great blue glass
When they sat on the soft sea grass

As the last light faded, their gaze was frozen
Not on each other, but on a tiny crescent
While it rose in the eastern skies
And grew and brightened before their eyes

The moon was doubled in a special way
It was reflected by the calm blue sea
All senses were awake on this dark still night
As they saw one reflection and one true light

Up it rose until there were two
Giant worlds caught in a lingering kiss
Where sea touched sky seemed a mist
Of heat and passion in a fiery blaze

And then they parted as if they knew
One must rise and light the sky
And the other must go a different way
Until they could meet another day

Ecstasy was found upon the beach this night
Gazing into the distance at the full moon light
Two lovers touched though not as planned
As they sat in awe hand in hand
RdanJ 9/2001
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1 posted 09-20-2001 11:25 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

oh yes, this is soft and beautiful...I think your "thoughtfaul pout" is working  
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2 posted 09-20-2001 11:29 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Dan~
Very romantically done~
Nice imagery ... hurry up moon ! !
~*Marge*~

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3 posted 09-20-2001 11:38 AM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

How romantic.  I remember a time just like this.  Thank you for a memory jogger!!

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
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4 posted 09-20-2001 01:06 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

Two lovers touched though not as planned
As they sat in awe hand in hand

hmmmmm...like it I do *s

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5 posted 09-20-2001 02:34 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Two lovers touched though not as planned
As they sat in awe hand in hand

Love it Dan!!  Great imagery creating a romantic story.
Yes! This is your style of writing and we want more of it!
Enjoyed...enjoyed!  
...did he hand her a feather? *S*

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  so you won't ever forget me~

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6 posted 09-20-2001 04:30 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed reading your poem...James
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7 posted 09-20-2001 05:30 PM       View Profile for Topheth   Email Topheth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Topheth

Great, great, Dan.  Those last eight lines were inspiring.
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8 posted 09-20-2001 06:46 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

How beautiful, much enjoyed.
Sandra
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Thanks everyone...this is a poem I have loved and hated...I started it about six months ago and never could get it to work so I put it up for a while and then would drag it back out and work on it come more....It got to the point the only time I would work on it was after the second bowl of double dutch almond ice cream...as punishment....It is still not where I hope it winds up, but I wanted to post it before I got to the point of deleting it.

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

Alan
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10 posted 09-22-2001 10:48 PM       View Profile for Alan   Email Alan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alan

Rusty...something this good..you should never delete..enjoyed it alot
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11 posted 09-23-2001 01:27 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Sorry, but deletion is futile...compulsory completion is mandated by the throngs who have already read it.  But I know what you mean about dragging it around for a long time, begging it to behave. Good luck on re-writes. I'm happy with it just as it is now.
NightShadow
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12 posted 09-24-2001 10:40 AM       View Profile for NightShadow   Email NightShadow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit NightShadow's Home Page   View IP for NightShadow

This is a very wonderful poem! Glad you didn't delete it so you could share it with all of us!  

A Life without Love, is no life at all...

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Awesome, beautiful poem.  I loved it! Brings back some moments for me as well, and makes me want to create some more.  I'm with Midnite, I don't think you should touch a single moonlit line.  

PS I'd be happy to take a stroll on the beach with you anytime  



[This message has been edited by Apachecat906 (edited 09-24-2001).]

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14 posted 09-24-2001 11:59 AM       View Profile for HopeS   Email HopeS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HopeS's Home Page   View IP for HopeS

Embracing in Moonlight touch
Yes I loved this
very, very much

stroll on the beach
Two hearts reach
Hope
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15 posted 09-24-2001 01:19 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Yanno...this was so romantic, and brought back such vivid memories for me, and for that I thank you more than you will ever know.  So soft, and gentle, and you did an awesome job on your visuals (almost pictured me there   hah!)
The Rusty Knight
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16 posted 09-24-2001 01:51 PM       View Profile for The Rusty Knight   Email The Rusty Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit The Rusty Knight's Home Page   View IP for The Rusty Knight

Thank you,

I guess when you struggle with a poem for so long you lose your perspective of where it is now...it must be getting close when such lovely ladies with such inspiring poems of their own on pip are inspired to take a walk along the beach with me ...he blushes..

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

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17 posted 12-08-2001 11:28 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

This is wonderful.....

Bridgette  
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