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Two Crows
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Two Crows |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee 
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Two Crows Sitting on a wire One said to the other You're black! The other said And you're not? The first replied But I'm on the right! The second replied That doesn't make you right! The first one screeched I have a feather that pricks Me right in the rear When I sit here daily Watching you preen! The second looked At the first ones rear (A) feather is true! For your rear is Bare for all to see Seems you picked one Too many To cast in the name of envy. So I'm glad I'm on the left For I much prefer Seeing you coming Than going! So you may be on the right And you may choose another wire But at least I'm not forced To always turn towards the wind! So if you choose to stay I'll turn with you So your rear end is not in my face And we'll wait together For your new feathers But I will not apologize For my luster! The first one thinks The wind picks up They both turn Now you're on the right! He lends Yes, I am. States the second As another crow Flits down beside the first And now so are you! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I so very much enjoyed this Regina! What a terrific story ... beautifully told, and wonderful lessons woven within the lines. Great piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Blondie Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 307Ohio |
I really enjoyed this poem, with the cautionary tale...yet I am confused...maybe it's the blonde hair could you explain the bare end for me?  |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hehe, those poor crows don't know what they are doing to my head right after I wake up! *grins* Great write! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I enjoyed the write as much as the lesson. Thank you for this uplifting poem. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wise words my friend. . . great job here. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Bilby Junior Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 14Northern Territory, Australia |
Interesting tale. I liked the tighter, early stanzas more than the latter part which perhaps rambles too much. For the crows to work as a device in this kind of poem they need to remain cartoon-like, easy to watch, colorful and well-defined. cheers, Alan |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Oh, Regina! This was absolutely wonderful and what fantastic words of wisdom you magically weaved in this piece.....a lesson to be learnt by many. This is such a delicate topic and one that I feel so strongly about. Too many people judge others by the color of their skin or for other reasons. We are all made from the same fabric so why can't we live together in harmony and peace? This is a question I so often ask myself and it is one issue that on occassion has made me very angry at those who have racist views. Thank you so much for your words and your kind soul. Take care....Sue Suetang |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Kit: Thank you for allowing me to add some humor and some lesson for today. Appreciate you! Blondie: Sure! (Showing our tail) sometimes makes for a bare naked lesson. As he pulled his feathers out in anger...envy...As birds do when stressed. So glad you enjoyed. Hope that made the (tail) more bearable Masked Intruder: Thank you! Glad to add a note of enjoyment to the start of your day. Gemini: You're welcome! Thank you for your sweet reply Sven: Thanks! Just trying to reach for some humor and some reasoning. Bilby: Thank you for reading and adding suggestion. I wrote this in the ten minutes I had this morn. Trying to lend a different note from sorrow. Just wanted to add some smiles and human/nature. Suetang: You're wonderful ya know that! How could I not try to respect others with such good examples around here! Thank you all for visiting my verse. Love and Peace to all. Sincerely, Regina |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your ten minutes of writing caused a wonderful smile to emerge...thank you for this! I couldn't help but think of Hekyll and Jekyll... |
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