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SEA

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with you

0 posted 2001-09-19 02:25 AM

I’ve been sitting here
with my feet in the sand
watching people pass
hand in hand
I see the words
spoken in their eyes
and silently I wish
in painful realize

I’ve been sitting here
just taking in the view
lost in my thoughts
thinking of you
as the day fades
night drifts in slowly to this beach
and I wonder softly
why are you so out of reach

I’ve been sitting here
watching each wave rise and retreat
this ache inside
has left me feeling incomplete
and like the passing of ships
in night of pitch black
if I reach out, I wonder
are you reaching back?

~SEA~

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2001-09-19 03:43 AM

SEA~
Such thoughts of aching in the wee small hours of the morn~

Nicely done, hon~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Dee
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since 2000-08-19

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Queensland, Australia

2 posted 2001-09-19 05:40 AM

Such sadness in your words Sea. Hope all goes well for you and he is back soon.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2001-09-19 07:31 AM

the ache that pulls our tides...*sigh*
felt this one Sea-girlie...even if me toes arent in the sand

beautiful piece of longing and retrospect.
jm

Well I looked to the sky for my anthem
The words and the music came through
But words and music can never touch
The beauty that I've seen in you

Kit McCallum

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4 posted 2001-09-19 07:33 AM

You've captured the ache of longing beautifully Susan ... very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Alan
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right next door

5 posted 2001-09-19 09:38 AM

SEA...this is so sad. I can feel the loneliness in your words. I hope you get what you a wishing for. great writing
alan

SEA

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with you

6 posted 2001-09-19 10:29 AM

thank you

I didn't really mean for this to be sad.....just looking inward a bit

thank you all very much.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

7 posted 2001-09-19 10:30 AM

you often say don't read everything into your poems...so I am responding by saying you wrote a wonderful "feeling" poem today.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

SEA

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with you

8 posted 2001-09-19 10:41 AM

thank you

yes, sometimes it's just what is swirling around inside.....it isn't always a personal reflection.....and this is just the way my thoughts came out

Sven

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East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2001-09-19 06:41 PM

it's amazing what feelings can come out when we look inside. . .

great job SEA. . . I love the "feeling" here as well. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

rosepetals25

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PA

10 posted 2001-09-19 06:50 PM

SEA,

Your writing radiates such feeling. How could you not feel the longing in your words. I love it

TaraB

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Canada eh.

11 posted 2001-09-19 07:56 PM

I KNOW this feeling.

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

Gemini
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Wisconsin, USA

12 posted 2001-09-19 08:18 PM

A splendid write, filled with longing and tenderness from your heart.

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

13 posted 2001-09-20 10:27 PM

SEA-
   This is beautifully penned, my friend.
   You've expressed the feelings well.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Topheth
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Texas

14 posted 2001-09-20 11:04 PM

"if I reach out, I wonder
are you reaching back?"

I FEEL this, SEA... I FEEL this! Great work.

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

15 posted 2001-09-22 07:54 AM

I’ve been sitting here
just taking in the view
lost in my thoughts
thinking of you
as the day fades
night drifts in slowly to this beach
and I wonder softly
why are you so out of reach

This image is of great lonliness. To watch something dark crawling in onto the shores of your heart. Waiting....Soft and yet blue. A very poignant picture. Thank you for sharing.

Sincerely,
Regina

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